Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
people have a different approach to deal with the opportunities they will get in their life. Some people grab the opportunity immediately when they get; others wait for the right one to come. As it is very controversial, in my opinion, there is not only one way to decide. I developed my opinion on the topic in the following paragraph.
Sometimes it is better to take the chance once you get otherwise similar opportunity may not come. As an increasing population, global demands for the job will increase in the passing time; people have to compete in the same place become tough than the previous year. On the other hand, getting a good job and good skill as well as talent not a cup of tea for all. Furthermore, if these people do not get a well-placed job, frustration may be raised in them. For the sake of the well beings, it is better to be safe and if possible then look after the next opportunity. In this way, people will be free from pressure as well and they are a good state to approach upcoming better prospectives.
However, a similar situation may not be good for a more determined person. In that case, it is better to take a chance to be best than adjust in better. Mostly, this determination pays well to the person for sure; otherwise, if they do not take the chance they may be settled in the place where they do not belong. but if they dare to go on, there is always an open door for them to meet their goal. For instance, my brother has good skills in management and he has the best academic background also. Admittedly, he had good determination to be a job holder in the central bank. During the struggle, he had a lot of opportunities to join the private sector, but, he kept resolute on his decision. Finally, after several years of the attempt, he had succeeded. Therefore, it is essential to keep patients if the person has good determination and belief in oneself.
In conclusion, the chance may not be the same for every person. if the person is vulnerable, they should grab the opportunity if they have the chance. but, while it is better to wait for a better opportunity who has a strong determination to succeed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, then, therefore, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1763.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50895140665 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73542294839 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478260869565 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 566.1 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.852712746 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.1363636364 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7727272727 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45454545455 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274037227113 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0823774026235 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572813145144 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177795694446 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0267821891715 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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