Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that asking children to be responsible and control their financial inputs and outputs will help them in different kind of ways to be successful in their adulthood. Contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who argue that it is not appropriate for children to deal with the money so much and parents are better not to expect them to concern about spending or saving money. I, to a great extent, agree with the idea that teaching children general ideas about money and make some rules for them to manage their financial resources is absolutely essential.
First and foremost, by asking children to feel responsible for their money and restricting them to spending their money, they gradually understand that how hard their parents work in order to supply everything for their children need and how meritorious is the money they spending for them. For example, when they learn that they must ignore some toys they really desire because they should spend money for things they need, they understand the sacrifices of their parents.
Another significant fact should be taken into consideration is that having a definite source of money and learning about the transactions of money due to the purchasing, selling, borrowing or lending increases children's power in mathematical and also logical thinking. This is so helpful especially when they go to schools when their financial experiences help them so much in their lessons. Also in their communications, they get familiar with the process of logical thinking and they have more potential to be a leader or influencing individual among their friends because they know the reasonable actions which should take place in decision makings and time managements.
Finally yet importantly, by relying on their experiences with money and issues related to it, they will face great opportunities in their future. Not only may probably they succeed in colleges and universities but also they can be always nominated for important jobs because the different way of thinking they have with respect to their peers who did not learn money management as a child. There are many examples of CEOs and entrepreneurs who start the pillars of their innovative business when they were few years old and later on, based on those experiences they become leaders of big companies with thousands of employees.
On the basis of the points mentioned above, I am convinced that it is actually vital to teach children managing their money because at the first place the completely understand the value of money and also can develop their logical and mathematical thinking skills. Also, it helps them enormously to be a professional and prosperous business man in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 579, Rule ID: ABSOLUTELY_ESSENTIAL[1]
Message: Use simply 'essential'.
Suggestion: essential
... to manage their financial resources is absolutely essential. First and foremost, by asking child...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...cision makings and time managements. Finally yet importantly, by relying on their ex...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'so', 'still', 'for example', 'kind of', 'with respect to', 'to a great extent']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.2079002079 0.229887763892 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.155925155925 0.158761421928 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0873180873181 0.0866891130778 101% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0686070686071 0.046263068375 148% => OK
Pronouns: 0.10395010395 0.0685040099705 152% => OK
Prepositions: 0.126819126819 0.118717715034 107% => OK
Participles: 0.04158004158 0.0351676179071 118% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.76809384789 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.037422037422 0.0309702414327 121% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0582120582121 0.0887237588012 66% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.018711018711 0.0209618222197 89% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.02079002079 0.0139019557991 150% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2754.0 2387.08602151 115% => OK
No of words: 448.0 408.028673835 110% => OK
Chars per words: 6.14732142857 5.86048508987 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.339285714286 0.338922669872 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.28125 0.251872472559 112% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.203125 0.174417080927 116% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.133928571429 0.112833075102 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76809384789 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511160714286 0.524397521467 97% => OK
Word variations: 58.535183173 59.2087087015 99% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6684587814 63% => OK
Sentence length: 34.4615384615 20.5533526081 168% => Sentence length is too long. for example, in the second paragraph, there are only two sentences :
First and foremost, by asking children to feel responsible for their money and restricting them to spending their money, they gradually understand that how hard their parents work in order to supply everything for their children need and how meritorious is the money they spending for them.
For example, when they learn that they must ignore some toys they really desire because they should spend money for things they need, they understand the sacrifices of their parents.
Sentence length SD: 60.2149994092 48.84282405 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 211.846153846 120.699889404 176% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.4615384615 20.5533526081 168% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.07692307692 0.644075263715 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 62.5865384615 45.7405998639 137% => OK
Elegance: 1.14556962025 1.45489161554 79% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298427847981 0.300154397459 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.145226425364 0.103427244359 140% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0678166035213 0.0752933317313 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.669787461574 0.497263757937 135% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.119105939266 0.151897553556 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150142300467 0.114077575197 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0560126691491 0.0781384742642 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.369182575945 0.336927656856 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0362603465513 0.067059652881 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206962157907 0.210909579961 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0463788212401 0.0618886996521 75% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.86379928315 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.91756272401 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
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Rates: 80 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 24 Out of 30