Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With the development of education, children nowadays are exposed of numerous knowledge since a very young age. Recently, whether a kid should manage money in his/her childhood to cultivate his/her responsibility is under heated discussion. Personally, I disagree with the idea mainly because of the following reasons.
To begin with, children are likely to adopt bad habits instead of being responsible if they are allowed to hold a large quantities of money at a very young age. It is human's instinct to chase for extravagance and live a more comfortable life. Without much education, a toddler may waste money on things which are not necessary, toys at a sky-high price, for example. Besides, they may even keep up with Jones concerning spending more money. Take my cousin for example, he was given a comparatively large amount of money since he was at primary school with the aim to learn financial management. However, he spent it on video games and indulged himself in virtual world. At last, he emerges in the game and does not want to shoulder the duties of a family instead of becoming responsible, which was adverse to his parents' expectation.
Secondly, life and property security of a family is likely to be damaged if its kids are granted a large sum of money because the society is so complicated nowadays. The last few decades has witnessed rapid development of financial markets. There are countless kinds of products such as bonds, stocks, options, derivatives, etc. emerging in front of customers. Even well-educated adults may not understand the cash flow of a financial product and may fall into traps set by frauds, leaving alone juvenile teenagers. A recent news is an example to the point. It is reported that an adolescent who was going to be university student after the summer vacation was cheated out of tuition by a telephone call. Unfortunately, the victim was so ashamed that she committed a suicide. If she had not been given the right to hold the tuition, this tragedy could never have happened.
Last but not least, there are many alternative ways to bring up a child to be a responsible adult, reading books, taking outdoor exercises or practicing an instrument for example. Taking myself for example, I become a responsible adult because my parents asked me to read many biographies since I was in kindergarten. Stories of Mary Curry, Elbert Einstein and Steve Hoking, etc. inspire me a lot with their charming personalities. All those great people never give up when they come across obstacles in life and are always responsible for their individual carer development. In addition, not only are they responsible for their own sake, but also carry the duties of their motherland or even the whole human race.
Taking all reasons above, including being addicted to bad habits, causing financial loss and existing alternative ways, into consideration, I am strongly against the statement that children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'quantity'?
Suggestion: quantity
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'recent news'.
Suggestion: Recent news
...auds, leaving alone juvenile teenagers. A recent news is an example to the point. It is repor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in addition, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2511.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 498.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0421686747 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84858237402 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 286.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574297188755 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 805.5 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5945245355 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5769230769 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1538461538 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38461538462 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242793128908 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552690335332 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639136747598 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150016396492 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0830217246543 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.