Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With the development of technology and a wide variety of opportunity work in present days which people can never imagine in past. In the past however it is not easier to identify the diverse career or job for the individual. Some people think that in the past people can easily obtain a secure and successful life but present days it is not possible. Not surprisingly, the number of controversies over this issue is overwhelmed. Among this controversy, I prefer the first one which I elaborate followings.
First and foremost, technological and industrial advancement invent various job field like software developer, structural engineer and computer engineer etc. But, it is also true that to adapt to this job people required more motivation, knowledge and skill. To secure their future they diligently trying to achieve it. But, in the past, there are only a few types of job such as agricultural, administration, industrial job etc. People can easily choose this field without hesitation and can secure their life. But, for various kind of job, it is often difficult for people to choose the right path. Moreover, there is also ups and downs of those fields which people is not possible to predict and always depends on the market situation. For particular, when I entered into the college I chose electrical because that time communication field was newly immense and anyone can easily can security to life. But, after completing my graduation I observed that the demand of the field is declined and the market filled with other jobs. Thus, it is difficult for the present days to identify the right path.
Furthermore, in the past, people's expectation was limited and they lead a happy life with this limitation. But, now people's lifestyle is changed and more expensive. For instance, my father was a school teacher and with his limited salary, he raised all the four children. Moreover, he has just completed his higher secondary and got a chance to teach the student. But, in present days to enter as a teacher in the school at least requires to complete undergraduate. Moreover, sometimes it is also difficult for a government job. Besides, life is so expensive now that with this teaching salary almost impossible to raise a child. But, in the previous teaching was a decent job and my father easily raised all children which may not think in present days. Another different machine replaces people's work. Consider a coffee shop, to make coffee needs at least six people three persons for making the coffee, one for taking the order, one for cash counter and one for delivery. But, now coffee used to make coffee maker, for delivery shop used a robot, one person is for only taking order and cash which is also computerized. Thus, a machine actually replaces the people's job and people struggling more for holding the job
position.
To recapitulate, in my personal opinion I think more diverse the field more difficult to secure the career. In present days, the job market is so uncertain that people always feel pressure and stress to secure the job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...ent days which people can never imagine in past. In the past however it is not easier t...
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Line 9, column 440, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'completing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: completing
...teacher in the school at least requires to complete undergraduate. Moreover, sometimes it i...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Position
...e struggling more for holding the job position. To recapitulate, in my personal o...
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Line 15, column 24, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
... position. To recapitulate, in my personal opinion I think more diverse the field more dif...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, thus, at least, for instance, i think, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2563.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 517.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95744680851 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69802693065 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468085106383 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 811.8 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.5087138543 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3793103448 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8275862069 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10165831195 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0347575125651 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446944424852 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0747062379661 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0226865652059 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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