Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People always settle in different situations that make them decide for it. Decision making is a critical issue, especially for young people, because they are sensitive and less experienced in life. In comparison with the past, today, young people are less dependent on their parents for deciding on their lives. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, today young people have more experience as compared with the past. Being experienced is essential for deciding because it helps one to meet issues effectively. Also, have lots of experience helps one to see diverse aspects of an issue clearly and can choose the right decision based on his reasoning. There are lots of ways to gain experiences these days, such as traveling around the world and communicating with people efficiently. When one travels, he will meet new people and will hear about their lifestyles and about their problems. Knowing about other people's problems and their solutions for solving those problems helps us to increase our knowledge and our experience. Young people use these capacities to improve their experiences and increase their ability for decision-making.
On the other hand, today, youths are educated in school and learn from the media to be independent. Education theories suggest that being independent helps students to be more successful in their lives and their education. School and university courses are planning based on independency, which makes young people more dependent on themselves. Also, different media are encouraging youths to live separate from their parents after the legal age. Television, the internet, and books are full of characters that are living independently from their parents. Also, living independently is advertised a lot in different media. Youths are affected profoundly by these concepts, which encourage them to separate from their parents. Living independently gives them the ability to decide about their own lives and to not rely on their parents for decision making.
In conclusion, I think that these days, young people have more ability to decide about their own lives. Because there are various ways to gain experience and improve knowledge, young people are more experienced, which helps them to make better decisions. Also, education systems and media learn youths to be independent and be able to make decisions about their own lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, i feel, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2062.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34196891192 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73171633868 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468911917098 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 637.2 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.7996606995 48.9658058833 45% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.7272727273 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5454545455 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22727272727 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.42250934974 0.236089414692 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13626993806 0.076458572812 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0991821233744 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.30075319617 0.150856017488 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.071111293636 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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