Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, people have busy and complicated lives, which makes it hard to decide which work has priority more than others. Parents are engaged with their careers most of the time and do not have free time to spend with their children. While some people argue that it has a better result if parents spend their free time on children's schoolwork, I believe that spend spare time playing games and sports are beneficial for both parents and children. In the following, I map out some arguments to elaborate my position.
To begin with, spending free time playing games and sports help parents with their mental health. As I mentioned above, parents are very busy and overwhelmed with their problems. They might have job failure and have been faced with economic issues. These problems may affect parents' mental health, which appears in their behavior with children. However, having fun and playing with children helps parents to be calm and avoid the effects of problems on their mentality. They will be free of their problems for a while, which lets them not thinking about their career and relax. They will behave with their children better and be more efficient in their work.
Second, playing with parents helps children to learn some behaviors better and has improved mood, which allows them to be more successful in school and whole life. Children spend lots of time in school and do schoolwork at home, which makes them tired and bored. Playing with parents helps youths to overcome weariness and have an improved mood. If they have a better mental state, they will be more efficient in their course works. They can do their homework with tranquility and get better results in school. Furthermore, during playing with parents, children learn how they should behave with others? Playing comes with win and loss, and through playing, they learn not to be sad with losing. Also, they learn how to meet problems and solve them. Therefore, they can solve their problems in school and in their lives better and more efficient.
In conclusion, parents should spend their leisure time having fun with their children, because it is beneficial for both parents and children. Spend time playing with children cause parents to have better mental health and be more productive in their work. Also, playing with parents has positive effects on children too. It makes them more capable of solving problems and being more successful in school and their whole lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2060.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01216545012 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23300672828 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.423357664234 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 577.8 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6451044813 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.8333333333 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.125 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95833333333 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35536869022 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133239054763 0.076458572812 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103128307263 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.284936878449 0.150856017488 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.086463795666 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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