Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Decision making indeed is an important process which makes up personality of every single individual and shapes their future. To emphasize the importance of decisions made during a person's life, some indicate that nowadays individuals of younger generation make decision on their own instead of relying on their parents, as past generation used to. I also believe that young people tend to make decision on their own rather than depending on their parents.
First and most importantly, that the young people can make decision independently regardless of their parents is becuase of better family treatment and education, that is, parents nowadays have better insight on how to raise their children independently since the field of pscyhology has advanced since past, and parents learnt how to treat their children in order to build their personality better. For instance, rarely occurred that a parent starts a book about how to teach children various values in past, but such books are so prevalent and popular among parents nowadays.
Secondly, we should not overlook the role of media, e.g. television, radio, internet, etc., in establishing the young people's personality. The media was not dominant in the past as it is today, and now various options are imprinted in young people's minds due to advertisements and other programs exisitng in different medias. With existance of media, young people learn various options, and gradually learn what aspect to consider when making a choice. For instance, there was no fasion shows in the past, and young people used to ask their parent's opinion about how to dress. But the need for this dependence is obviated since young people observe the options and the choice of other people's and learn how to choose between the available alternatives.
Finally, the training system taught in schools was so simple in the past that young people only learned about scientific subject such as math, biology, chemistry, etc. However, the awareness of society was gradually improved, since a change in the educational system. This change happenned becasue society started to realize that knoweledge is not confined to math and biology, but also personality and social interations and how to make decision should be augmented in young people as well. The schools tend to have a better training systems nowadays that teaches individuals how to consider various ascpects when making a choice, untying their dependence to their parents.
In conlcusion, young people are no longer dependent on their parent for making decision as they used to be in the past. In other words, this independence is partly a result of better awareness of one's personality, which is evovled gradually over time due to better knowledge of parents, prevalence of media, and better training program in schools, and can lead to a better society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 182, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...e importance of decisions made during a persons life, some indicate that nowadays indiv...
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Line 4, column 502, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...ut how to teach children various values in past, but such books are so prevalent and po...
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Line 6, column 119, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...ternet, etc., in establishing the young peoples personality. The media was not dominant...
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Line 10, column 197, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... partly a result of better awareness of ones personality, which is evovled gradually...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, e.g., finally, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2405.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22826086957 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68542502436 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482608695652 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 737.1 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.7927011709 48.9658058833 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.3125 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.75 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3125 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.467487798665 0.236089414692 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.176483348868 0.076458572812 231% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108645618903 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282578662264 0.150856017488 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482115557453 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.65 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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