The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Celebrities including famous entartianers and athletes indeed exert a great influence on the people of a society. To indicate the importance of celeberities' influence, some people indicate that celebrities have a greater influential effect on younger people that they do on older people. I also believe that the convictions of the celebrities change young people's screeds more effectively.
First and most importantly, the younger people have a more pliable personality than older people, in that their opinions and believes are not entrenched yet and they can change their minds more easily than older people. Let us assume that a lecturer wants to influence people in a class full of teenagers. The teacher can easily make his point and affects students' opinion, but this is not as easy as changing the opinion of majrotity of a group of 50-year-old people. In addition, older people tend to be dogmatic, sticking to a belief they once held. Seldon does an elderly change his/her opinion just by having a conversation.
Second, social media plays a major role in influencing people. Different people all over the world follow celebrities in social medias, majority of which is consisted with younger people. Thus, younger people are more exposed to opinions held by celebrities than the older individuals. For instance, more younger people follow Justin Beiber of Christiano Ronaldo on Instagram and Facebook, and they are more susceptible to change their opinions when they see the news fads that these celebrities spread in the social medias.
Last but not the lease, the younger people have more enthusiasm for activities that celebrities do than older people. Seldom does a 60-year-old grandmother care about what a specifici famous celebrity wears or does in her life. Younger people tend to emulate behavior of famous celebrities to establish their position in the society as a "cool" guy or girl. For instance, I used to have a friend who changed how she walked or ate whenever she watched a new movie in which the movie star acted or treated differenty, emulating the star's actions and behaviors.
In essence, the influence of celebrities cannot be underestimated as they tend to change behavior and opinions of younger people’s. In other words, there is a chance that younger people get brain-washed if they are not catious about the occasional venom celebrities spew forth.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, thus, for instance, in addition, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2149.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25427872861 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91424286854 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498777506112 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 670.5 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1764531152 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.105263158 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5263157895 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73684210526 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.521521337366 0.236089414692 221% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185029550033 0.076458572812 242% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.216333118555 0.0737576698707 293% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.3685190354 0.150856017488 244% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.287819067781 0.0645574589148 446% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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