Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of making decision individually. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely select the second statement. It is my firm belief that nowadays, young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. I think so because of the two reasons that I will develop them in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, I believe that in modern world every person could reach the valuable information and the knowledge could help you to have a better decisions. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. For instance, three years age, I was not happy with my situation. I wanted to change where I lived. I tried to find the perfect country to live. I tried to use internet to get information about some countries that was really helpful to me. As a matter of fact, I think internet helped me a lot at that point because I could read about people with different experience in variety of counties. Finally, I chose to live in the Norway for two years and I think my decision at that time was really good and appropriate. You see, by the rise of internet every one can have better choice only by communicating with the other people all around the world. This reason could vividly show that decision making in today's world is easier and base on that young people could make better decision.
Finally, I my view, people in modern world are more well-educated and that could help them make better decision. For instance, once my grandpa told me that many years age, he wanted to buy some wrench but he could not know how do made a perfect decision because he did not know anything about farming and agriculture. So he made a bad deal with some farmer to buy his wrench but I was bad mistake. In modern world almost every person have the rudimentary information about every topic because they learn different material in their school years. Therefore, I would be more possible for them to make a great decision by their own. You see, the example like this could clearly shows us how much having knowledge could help us have better choice in our lifetime.
In the light of above mentioned reasons, I think that in modern day young people could make better decisions by their own and I think accessibility to information and being well-educated are two major reasons that could explain this topic better.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 412, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ed to find the perfect country to live. I tried to use internet to get informatio...
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Line 5, column 676, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'show'
Suggestion: show
...ee, the example like this could clearly shows us how much having knowledge could help...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, really, second, so, therefore, well, for instance, i think, as a matter of fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2012.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65740740741 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52453240995 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467592592593 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 640.8 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.591732451 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8095238095 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5714285714 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333344837295 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101950378694 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109117223103 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240346844994 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537914124 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.82 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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