Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours
In todays world, people's overal health and also their satisfaction from their live is of a great importance. Lots of reaserchers and schoulars are working on the ways and methods to improve their societies health and satisfaction, and they introduced many methods to improve it. One of the sphears that attracted very attantion is people's work life. Plenty of people holads the conviction that it is better to work more hours every day, instead for less days a week, whereas others might hold exactly the opposite view. Ergo, when it comes to my stance, by weighing up the pros and cons, I firmly subscribe to the first conviction instead of the later one. I will investigate the reasons supporting my viewpoint in the following essay.
The first point to be mentioned is that working longer hours for only 3 days a week will let employees to have more freedom to do their personal stuffs for rest of the week. When people have 4 days off rather than only weekends, they are able to dedicate their time to spend for things they are willing to do alongside their job. For example, some people wants to go out alone or just hangout with their friends, and this only possible if they have off days during the week, because weekend is the time to spend with your family. Furthermore, working less days provide the opportunity for workers to go to the gym or yoga classes, which is kind of impossible if they are working for all week. Therefore, working longer hours for less days and having more day offs, let people to spend time for what they care to do beside they works and family.
Alongside the elaborated reason above, another idea that is noteworthy to consider is that working longer hours increase workers deep work. To be more specific, when employee start a task or a topic, by working longer hours on that job is able to concentrate deeply on the task or topic with no distractions such as end of the work hour. As an illustration, I remember a time when I had been working in an urban developing institution, and all the interns had to wright an article about what they were working on. The wage payment method was based on work hours not work days. So, all the employees prefered to stay longer hours to finish they task, because it was more effective and time saveing rather than starting tour task from scratch next day. As a result,working longer hours for less days every week, increase workers productivity.
All in all, my sound belief is that having a job which I have to work for more hours but 3 days a week is more fascinating; because in this way person has more freedom to do their own shores, further it increase person's deep work and concentaration.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 450, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun days is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... work more hours every day, instead for less days a week, whereas others might hold ...
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Line 5, column 450, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'offed'.
Suggestion: offed
...ds, and this only possible if they have off days during the week, because weekend i...
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Line 5, column 552, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun days is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... with your family. Furthermore, working less days provide the opportunity for worker...
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun days is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ek. Therefore, working longer hours for less days and having more day offs, let peop...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , working
... task from scratch next day. As a result,working longer hours for less days every week,...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...om scratch next day. As a result,working longer hours for less days every week, i...
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun days is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
.... As a result,working longer hours for less days every week, increase workers produ...
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Line 13, column 204, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'increases'?
Suggestion: increases
...edom to do their own shores, further it increase persons deep work and concentaration.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, whereas, for example, kind of, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2213.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6394129979 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50212432105 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475890985325 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.2369729104 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.944444444 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61111111111 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384197331092 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142730633191 0.076458572812 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101849417347 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258560960829 0.150856017488 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.085664136187 0.0645574589148 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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