Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, making friendship has played a crucial role for people. Views differ when it comes to the issue whether it is beneficial to keep your old friends rather than to make new friends for yourself. I believe, however, making new friends are by far more important of whose those keep their old friends since bolsters their morale and provide them to improve their social interactions.
The first aspect of current discussion which demands a severe contemplation is that having new friends can raise people self-esteem. One of the rigors of living in the hectic modern life is that having more friends make people incentive to work hard. In another word, they need stimulation to do their tasks properly. For instance, an introverted student that feels loneliness in his class, and he has a conflict with his parents because of his failure in the exams. A new friend sees his weakness at some points and helps him to make progress, which means he pushes him to keep studying hard to succeed. Even though old friends are always considered as a confidant, but having the new one is as much as valuable as the old one.
A further more subtle point is that by making new friends, people can socialize, and develop into highly preferable friendship. Hardly does anyone can make a friendship without socializing. That is to say, people need interacting with each other due to shed their anxieties and tensions. In fact, catch up with new people can lead endless hours of fun with them. Take the case of an old man for instance. He had some old friends that they passed away and he feels despondent by his uneventful life. Being joined in local clubs can rescue his precarious life which he meets new people and spend his time and forget about his unfortunate lifestyle. Not only he can emulate others to be happy, but also he can remove all the traditions that once he struggles in his life.
To summarize, it should be emphasized meet up with new people inspires person's mind to be happy as well as provide them an opportunity to socialize. It is high time we stopped overlooking the fact that happy lifestyle comes from socializing with meeting new people. Who can refute the invaluable things that bring a new friend?
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 271, Rule ID: WHOSE_DT[5]
Message: Did you mean 'who's'?
Suggestion: who's
...ew friends are by far more important of whose those keep their old friends since bols...
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Line 8, column 80, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind being'.
Suggestion: mind being
...eet up with new people inspires persons mind to be happy as well as provide them an opport...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, so, well, for instance, in fact, as well as, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1850.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79274611399 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5495334492 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554404145078 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1888424127 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.5 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216686050362 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0698820969431 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0570586713742 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145514162924 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687395991539 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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