Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The ways one must pass to become a leader have recently become the focus of increased attention across the globe. In this regard, some people think that leaders born leaders. I firmly believe that leaders one can learn to be a leader. I feel this way because of two reason which I elaborate on them in the next paragraphs.
To begin with, environment has a drastic effect on the final destination of the human. People achieve their social, political, financial objects easier when they are in a conducive environment. Thus, it is environment, almost, that determines one's success, whether he is a natural-born hero or he is a natural-born hapless. My own experience is compelling to this idea. When I was a freshman, I had two friends named Ali and Hasan subjected to totally different environments; Ali was extremely talented and the other had a low quality of perception, the former was borne in a poor family while the latter was rich. Ali's family could not have provided him with enough educational classes. Having taken the important exam for the university entrance, Ali rejected but Hasan accepted. This pattern would probably extend to other facets of their life, make Hasan a hero and Ali a loser.
Second, hardworking creates champions. People who practice diligently have a better chance to grow and prosper in their life than those who rely on their own personal talents. Although having knocks is important in order to going to the next levels in life, it is only 1 percent of the whole way. Thus, inherent abilities and skills are more misleading factors rather than leading one. By contrast, people who work on themselves, put themselves in high pressure, and do not trust to their talents exceedingly grow in their life. In a celebrated example, Cristiano Ronaldo, the best football player of the world, started his football experience, while he had been identified as a mentally retarded person. He worked meticulously, push himself forward daily, and did not accept others' opinion of him to become his reality. Today, he is acknowledged to be one of the most successful athletes in the whole world. It is plain to see; only hard practicing could evoke such a result.
To put it all in a nutshell, although some people think the leadership characteristic to be inherent; I disagree. Not only do hard working could make leaders, but also environment plays a crucial role by its huge effects on the human outcome.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 244, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...is environment, almost, that determines ones success, whether he is a natural-born h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, thus, while, i feel, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2028.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92233009709 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78730830142 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592233009709 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.9039163998 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1739130435 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9130434783 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.65217391304 5.45110844103 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0937746681394 0.236089414692 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0294376244681 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0469509708654 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0674099856307 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477569755797 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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