Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Leadership comes naturally: one cannot learn to be a leader.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's modern world, young people play a crucial role in communities. they take over and manage the majority of tasks in the society from many aspects such as economy, culture, and industry, to name but a few. In this regard, there is a long-standing discussion among psychologists about to what extent society should expect young people to be obedient. Some psychologists believe that the amounts of rules juveniles have to consider not only is not a lot but also few. others, however, advocate the idea that societies have severe rules for young people that hinder them to become prosperous. I personally, concur with the latter. In the following paragraphs, I will delve in to the most important reasons.
To begin with, young people have to strive a lot to get parent's contentment entirely. As time passes and children grow up, parents have more expectations from their offspring. they expect their children to be well-educated and erudite. they have desire that their offspring to be independent and self-sufficient. they anticipate that they forming a family as soon as possible. they have to respect old traditions and customs. juveniles have to obtain all of these parents' desires to attain their satisfaction. All of these expectations put a lot of pressure on young people. For example, my parents want me to pursue my Ph.D. program because they think I flourish just by being well-educated.
By and large, young people, as pivotal individuals in society, have to attempt to keep pace with technology advancement along with other countries. they have to be diligent and hard-working in order to make the most of their time to help country’s progression. they do not have enough time for themselves to enjoy pleasure of life. In other words, they cannot allocate enough time to be in company with their immediate family members or intimate friends, doing sports, and so forth because communities expect them to work hard to contribute to development of the country. For example, when young people want to find a job, they have to be committed to very strict laws such as working ten-hours days, being up-to date, having graduate education and high social skills. this clearly demonstrates that young people have to strain for being accepted in the society.
To sum up, I really believe that not only do parents put a severe strain on their offspring, but also governments pass strict rules for juveniles to reach their aims. Hence, should parents and states perceive pressures on young people, they will reduce their expectations to have a better society from physical and mental aspects.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, really, so, well, for example, such as, by and large, in other words, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2190.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08120649652 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81375865009 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515081206497 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 670.5 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.751923039 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.25 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9583333333 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.20833333333 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0664667880819 0.236089414692 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0234604692169 0.076458572812 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0233684224137 0.0737576698707 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.042297462312 0.150856017488 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0275680924408 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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