Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's era tv has become our major source of entertainment, all the sections of the society actively watches it. therefore, the question of whether tv is harmful or beneficial for us has become imperative. personally, I believe tv's are causing damage to us, which we are continuously neglecting. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, incessant exposure to screen can cause damage to our eyes, which can make the vision impaired. Studies have suggested that children are being involved in watching movies for a longer duration, due to which almost every children of today's generation can be seen wearing spectacles to make for the loss of their vision. my personal experience is a compelling example of this. Ten years ago, when I was kid, on tv there used to come a lot of cartoon shows and that too right one after the other. As a result, I got stuck in watching them for three to four hours. therefore, my habit of watching prolong session of television started pain in my eyes, which ultimately resulted in doctor advising me to wear spectacles to correct my vision defect. if I would have not watched the tv, I won't have to wear glasses till today.
Secondly, major damage of the television and movies is on the brains of the children. As children have very sensitive mind, which becomes highly active while viewing tv and give rise to feeling of imitating what they have seen on the tv. this act of imitating can sometimes cost severely for children. For instance, my uncle's son who is just seven years old is fond of watching movies, especially of the superheroes. he used to spent hours watching his favorite superstars. Consequently, his mind becomes overwhelmed by the actions superheroes perform in the movie and he thought of imitating them, so that he can feel like a superhero. Hence, he went to the terrace of his house and tried to jump down thinking that he would fly like a superman. if my aunt had not seen him on time that what he is trying to do, we might have lost him. therefore, movies are severely affecting developing minds of the children.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that movies and televisions are deleterious for us. this is because they are causing vision impairment and because they are affecting the brains of the children and making them imitate their superstars.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, hence, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1971.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76086956522 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68582633392 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541062801932 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4396752233 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5909090909 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8181818182 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.81818181818 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0778204505013 0.236089414692 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0267199055133 0.076458572812 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.025056976701 0.0737576698707 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0460410641609 0.150856017488 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0151282830685 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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