Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
nowadays,the vision media like televisions,play a prominent role in the society.it can affect generations either in a good or bad way.some people have a positive perspective relating the influence of the televison and movies on the society,i believe that bad influence of them outweighs any other possible good influence.i feel that way for two reason,which i will explore in the following essay.
to begin with,movies and television first priority is to attract more viewers and so more financial profits.the owners of these institutions rarely cares about the actual content but more about how much money they can get.therefore,they can utilize inappropriate dialogues or contents and even aggressive stories to attract the young people especially teenagers.for example,i used to watch some of most famous series nowadays,it made a million of viewers,the story of this series is almost all about sexual ideas with improper conversations.in my opinion these kind of movies and series and also programs,can have a massive unpreferable influences on minds of young people,how to deal with same things in life.actually young people may act the way they see.this can be seen in many dramatic incidences .
moreover,restrictions are minimal nowadays.i mean,there is a huge number of television and so movie channels.some of them are good and the others are not.so the affect will be either in a good way or the opposite.recently i noticed that most of the movies are about violence and war.the actors can hold weapons and use them freely.young people usually attempted to try new things and imitate anything new.for example,few years ago,one of the students entered his school with a weapon,he started to shot at his colleagues.when they asked him why you did so?he replied,i wanted to be that champion in some movie he saw! i think this clearly shows the tremendous influence movies and televisions may have on young brains.
in conclusion,i strongly believe that harmful effects of televisions overweigh the good effects.i think that a restrict supervision of contents can help in lessen some unacceptable thoughts from penetrating miinds of generations
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, for example, i feel, i mean, i think, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1821.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40356083086 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.3298379547 2.67179642975 125% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.593471810089 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 20.6003584229 19% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 84.0 20.1344086022 417% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 233.921327587 48.9658058833 478% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 455.25 100.406767564 453% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 84.25 20.6045352989 409% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 38.0 5.45110844103 697% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 36.0 5.5376344086 650% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203164000889 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111373105349 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0301538008397 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111373105349 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301538008397 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 46.1 11.7677419355 392% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -22.24 58.1214874552 -38% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 6.10430107527 280% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 37.2 10.1575268817 366% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.22 10.9000537634 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.58 8.01818996416 157% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 10.002688172 290% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 35.6 10.0537634409 354% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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