Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Movies and television impact our society in many different ways. In fact , it is important to analyze the effect of these media on youngsters because they are very vulnerable. Many people probably believe that media have only positive impact on our young generation because they have a narrow view of the big picture ahead. In my opinion however, the television and movies have more negative impact than positive impact on young people's behavior due to a variety of reasons.
First of all, negative role models pictured in movies and television serials have a great impact on our young generation.These kind of characters often misbehave with the people, break rules and are misanthropic. Television program presents them in a glorified way that youngsters emulate there character blindly. For example, a small boy who constantly watch a television show of this type of character are more likely to follow those behavior. He may end up trying illegal drugs and alcohol and may become addicted without knowing the after effect. If the boy did not have seen this television character, his life would have been much better. This example clearly demonstrates the impact of negative role models on youngsters these days.
Secondly, television and movies are often controlled by people who wants to make the public think and act in a particular way. Because of the lack of life experiences and immaturity of young people they are often exploited by these bad people in our society. For instance, a young man who watches a television program which is supported by bad politicians will probably get a negative impression about the other political leader. Those powerful people will try to inject poisonous information to the youngsters mind through wrong news and events. As the young viewers are so innocent they will not be able to differentiate the truth and lie. Gradually young generation develop a hatred against politicians and may behave weird in public meetings. As long as there is no restriction for this kind of false information broadcasted through television, I believe that television and movies will have more bad than positive effect on young people.
In conclusion, television and movies always have more bad sides that often brings negative behavior in our youngsters. This is because young people are attracted to glorified negative villains and because there is no rule to control media's false information.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2037.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18320610687 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77217435523 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503816793893 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.8521123676 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.210526316 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6842105263 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05263157895 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291630707372 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0906357801033 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555332879522 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187107261939 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246476768385 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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