Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this sophisticated and progressive world one of the most fundamental parts of life is the way we can find our role in the society and how we can be beneficial. Find a good job will give us the sense of beneficince and would define our identity in our social interactions. I think parents can accelerate this process; the process in which childern learn to find their role. I feel that parents potentially can be helpful in preparing their children for the adult lif by encouraging them to take a part-time job. I feel this way because of two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, children who take part-time job during their teenage learn responsibility which is crucial for their adult life. A child would learn to be on-time and do the tasks carefully if the parents encourage him to participate a part-time job. Resposibility, I think, is the most important achievement a child can obtain from a limited job experience. My childhood experience is a compelling example of that mentioned idea. When I was fourteen, my mother asked me to help my uncle in his supermarket in the summer. During initial days I did not care about time, so I was so out of order. But days after my uncle told me to be on time unless I would loose my job. That experience learnt me the responsibility to time.
Secondly, the parents should encourage their children to take jobs because of its financial aspest. The part-time jobs helps family with their economic and financial dimentions, since each children can learn how to earn money, how to manage it, and how to spend. For example, one my friend was encouraged to work in his spare-time during summers in order to help his family. He devided his money into two parts; one for his sister the other for his school purchases. He had learnt how to manage money years ago and consequently he is a renowned buisinessman in our town.
In conclusion, given the reasons and examples stated above I am of the opinion that parents should encourage their children to have active participation in the society. In terms of this purpose part-time jobs helps the children not only to be responsible, but also to learn financial management.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, second, secondly, so, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1826.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74285714286 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81897289753 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498701298701 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.9568651514 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368501235727 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111858113294 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100235817099 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223147775786 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365427110944 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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