Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this progressive and sophisticated world, happiness is one the most sought after mental states which everyone constantly looking for. Although the world is transmitting and changing so quickly, I strongly believe people are happier nowadays. I feel this way because of two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the modern world has provided lots of new technologies and amenities for people to experience more satisfied lives. To be specific, the scientific and technologic revolution have been constanly changing the world and creating new facilities for contemporary human kind. Many communication technologies and accelerated transports have painted a sparkly different picture of the world, comparing with ancient lifestyles, in which many people can easily communicate with each other around the world. The easy access to communication through internet and accelerated trasports can potentionally bring about happiness. My own experience is a compelling example of this principle. When I left my home to a another country to study abroad, my greatest concern was my family, specially my mother, whom I adore. However, fortunately I had access to internet and new video call tools and mobile applications simplified the access to family. Had not the technology invented the new facilities, I would have been more anxious and depressed during education.
Secondly, this modern world has invented new methods of treatment and many diseases have been eradicated since the dawn of modern medicine. It is obvious that happiness is merged with health. The healthier an individual can live, the more satisfied he or she may grow up. Many recent medical and psychiatric observations are a great evidence of this idea; the idea of emergence of happy life in healthy body. These recent medical results shows that there is a strong correlation between ill patients suffering from different diseases and prevalence of mental illnesses; like anxiety disorder or unstable mood disorders. As a result modern medicine can reduce the risk of numerous types of diseases which consequently reduces the risk of mental disorders; therefore, nowadays people can be more happy by means of new medical methods and treatments.
In conclusion, according to reasons, examples, and evidence mentioned above I am of the opinion that in the current new world people can experience a happier life. The modern world has enhanced the communication tools and medical treatments which both can elevate the quality of life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 713, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2148.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41057934509 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95219693726 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566750629723 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7526521721 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.052631579 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8947368421 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63157894737 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148594460009 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.04964644674 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496619144635 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0957404753384 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375684549128 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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