Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Making children ready to become adults is a crucial duty for parents. Parents should not only satisfy their children’s needs but they should also prepare them for the future. Although many believe that a part-time job could be an astonishing option for maturity preparation, as far as I am concerned, it is not a suitable plan.
The first reason for my belief is the time children could spend learning what they want or developing the ability that is necessary for their future is used by a job which is neither permanent nor useful. For example, when I was a teenager, I was eager to work at a coffee shop as a barista. I could not get the job even though I found the position, because my father disagreed with my plan. His reason was, at that moment, I had to study and learn English instead of working, which turned out to be a good decision since I had enough time to study, so I enrolled in the university that I dreamed about.
Secondly, all part-time jobs are temporary and do not have the potential to guide children in their lives. Most of the part-time jobs are waiter or cashier opportunities, which do not require any specific capability so they do not teach anything to the people in these jobs. So, I believe, to prepare for the future, it is better to participate in classes that can teach practical skills, like finance classes which are the best option for those who want to invest in the stock market, which is a popular way of making money these days.
In conclusion, parents should not allow their children to have a part-time job if they want to prepare them for their future. Children who study in order to be accepted by universities and those who apply in useful classes have an advantage over those who work as part-time workers. Therefore, in my opinion, children should not have a part-time job.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1510.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 327.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61773700306 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5994603336 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519877675841 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.9825053605 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.153846154 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1538461538 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38461538462 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280787747974 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110905877827 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616132603595 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176786487748 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031942336652 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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