tpo 48
The world becomes more complicated than at any time in mankind's history. Due to the advances in technological tools, humans' lives become healthier but not easier than before. In that case, to avoid being a useless member of society, many people assert that adolescents should learn how to be an organized person. As far as I am concerned, they have some points in their view.
Firstly, if people want to do formal tasks, they have to obey the authority's rules which are complex and take forever and a day to reach the end of those tasks. Therefore, people should teach their teenagers to have a plan in order to do the formal necessary works as soon as possible. For example, one of my acquaintances wanted to take participate in Konkoor, An exam which is taken from students in order to let them choose university and major for themselves. He could not be able to participate in Konkoor since he did not know the procedure that should take to submit in that exam; consequently, he took the exam a year after that.
Moreover, since the world changes conspicuously, people should learn tons of skills these days. To learn all of these abilities, young adults should have an exact plan that demonstrates the path in which they have to take a step. For example, since I want to study abroad, I have to study English among my other duties and hobbies. For getting my duties done properly, I assembled a schedule which turned out to be an excellent idea. Because through my weeks, I could able to study my thesis, learned English and played my violin.
In conclusion, having a plan is neither useless nor a waste of time. On the contrary, it is not only a perfect way to keep up with governmental procedures but also it is a tremendous method to do routine tasks.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, moreover, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1454.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63057324841 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6372042087 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566878980892 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5873885277 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.9333333333 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9333333333 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53333333333 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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