Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th
The modern age has an enormous influence on families' behavior toward their children. Since most of the parents' time spent working outside, parents should spend their leisure time with their children playing games or sports. On the other hand, many people assert that parents should spend their free time to improve their children's functionality in school by practicing homework. As far as I am concerned, the first idea has numerous advantages over the second one.
Firstly, the most vital task of parents is not to prepare them for school, hence the school can get this job done perfectly. The main goal of parents is to give love to their children and teach them how to love each other and be a supportive person in their lives which can attain through playing games and sports. The reason is that through the game children learn how to cooperate with others in order to accomplish the goal of the game. For example, when I was a ten-year-old child, my family and I used to play basketball in our yard. If I wanted to win, I should have worked efficiently with my brother. And because of the game, my brother and I become close to each other and love each other.
Last but not the least, children not only need leisure time during the day but also their parents require it too. Parents usually work from the morning till evening; therefore, they need to relax at least before they go to bed. For example, my mother used to work in a school as a teacher, when she got back home at six o’clock every evening, we played cards with each other. I realized that both my mother and I need this game in order to get comfort after a long day.
In conclusion, playing games with children is neither a waste of time nor useless for parents due to the need for both parents and their children to peace in their free time. And more important than that is the duty of parents to teach their children how to love and support each other.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 45, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'families'' or 'family's'?
Suggestion: families'; family's
...modern age has an enormous influence on families behavior toward their children. Since m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, second, so, therefore, at least, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1588.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53714285714 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29626849031 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514285714286 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.2431853919 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.25 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.875 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314330415093 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107200719867 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0890797425386 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21000035062 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0612773875206 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.84 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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