Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Parents are always seeking to teach valuable knowledge to their children, since they are very first teacher of their children. Although some parents believe that their children should focus on their studies during school days, I am not convinced by this idea that children can learn all skills from schools. In other words, as students need to enter to real life as soon as possible, taking part-time jobs is a decent choice. From my vantage point, through part-time jobs, teenagers are prone to learn how effectively manage their money and to earn some achievements in their future jobs.
Firstly, it is undeniable that parents are responsible to support children's needs. But, as long as they fulfill kids' requests, the kids are not aware of the importance of money management. In other words, they do not admit their parents’ supports, since they do not know that how their fathers and mothers take a lot of efforts to make this money. On the other hand, if they get a part-time job, they will value parents' money since they will understand that after hard work, they can get money. Therefore, they will plan to save their salary and will not pay for expensive negative devices, such as play station or video games. This would help teenagers to be mature and ready for the future.
In addition, doing a part-time job would provide the opportunity for youths to have a strong resume and outstanding achievements in the job market. Indeed, since they have to balance between their studies and work, they will be well-organized. This ability would help them to schedule accurately for their tasks to have enough time to do each of them. As a result, when they hire in a company in the upcoming years, they have strong experience to manage their tasks and more prone to get some promotions during their employments. Hence, being successful in their work place is a natural result of having work experience in their teenage years.
To conclude, motivating youths to take a part-time career is a decent choice provides not only financial benefits for them, but also excellent work life in the future. Therefore, encourage your teenagers to take jobs and guarantee their success in their adulthood.
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'in addition', 'such as', 'as a result', 'in other words', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.239808153477 0.229887763892 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.146282973621 0.158761421928 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.083932853717 0.0866891130778 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0479616306954 0.046263068375 104% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0887290167866 0.0685040099705 130% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.115107913669 0.118717715034 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0167865707434 0.0351676179071 48% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.54556124799 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0479616306954 0.0309702414327 155% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0647482014388 0.0887237588012 73% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0263788968825 0.0209618222197 126% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00719424460432 0.0139019557991 52% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2206.0 2387.08602151 92% => OK
No of words: 372.0 408.028673835 91% => OK
Chars per words: 5.93010752688 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.33064516129 0.338922669872 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.239247311828 0.251872472559 95% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.155913978495 0.174417080927 89% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.120967741935 0.112833075102 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54556124799 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52688172043 0.524397521467 100% => OK
Word variations: 57.5817293066 59.2087087015 97% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 21.8823529412 20.5533526081 106% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6308064409 48.84282405 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.764705882 120.699889404 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8823529412 20.5533526081 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.823529411765 0.644075263715 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.54480286738 0% => OK
Readability: 45.807084124 45.7405998639 100% => OK
Elegance: 1.31355932203 1.45489161554 90% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.390337838167 0.300154397459 130% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.130984380464 0.103427244359 127% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0714008345058 0.0752933317313 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.510837829726 0.497263757937 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.124679389854 0.151897553556 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160863407243 0.114077575197 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601171266369 0.0781384742642 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.359714706481 0.336927656856 107% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0201555362403 0.067059652881 30% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27908530831 0.210909579961 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0203409320687 0.0618886996521 33% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 8.42114695341 154% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.