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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:Only people who earn a lot of money are successful.Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Essay topics: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
Only people who earn a lot of money are successful.
Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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Indeed, money is crucial to live in this modern competitive world, but it is not only one used to measure person's success. In my perspective, success can be estimated by the respect, fame and love for mankind. I would like to explore my points as follows: Successful is a person, who is respected due to one's benevolent deeds for welfare of poor. For instance, Mother Teressa contributed most of her life in arranging food, shelter, clothing and other necessitates for the needy and orphan kids. Her place in the history is indeed indelible even after her death people remember her selflessness, kindness and altruism. Even though, she did not possess immense fortune, she was known as one of the most successful person due to her charitable influences in the history. On the other hand, affluent man restricting his wealth to love outrageously and not helping needy people during the time of calamities might not consider successful.
When it comes to political leaders, most are measured by their achievements and their station within their nation. However, figures such as Mahatma Gandhi have gained recognition for his non- violent traits without accumulating wealth leaders. Another example is Narendra Modi the prime minister of india opened up large chain of hospitals in many towns and cities for easily accessible and free emergency treatment for people below poverty line. In contrary, leaders who possess wealth and least interested in development of a country.
High intellectual and cognitive level is another means people often use to measure success. Genius people such as Albert Einstein, Newton, Tesla, brook brothers etc are very well known for technological innovation, they might be ridiculed by others during their struggling years of life. But they proved themselves to the world that their blood, sweat and tears was worth more than any riches of the world by offering gift of new machines and inventions.
To sum up, there are myriad ways to explain success such as helping others, acquiring fame, and benevolence. Money is required for fulfill basic needs but not only the one to judge one's success.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, well, for instance, such as, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1783.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13832853026 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68273863738 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631123919308 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6878194194 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.4375 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6875 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9375 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0505961312277 0.236089414692 21% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0178362537698 0.076458572812 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0173481448937 0.0737576698707 24% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0294747332303 0.150856017488 20% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00798056228288 0.0645574589148 12% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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