Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Education is by far one of the most significant factors that can shape children's minds and affect their future lives. Views differ when it comes to the issue of whether parents nowadays play a more important role in their children's education compared to the past. The growing importance of having education as well as various kinds of obstacles in children's learning has provoked parents to get more involved in their children's education.
The first aspect to point out is that today education has become a significant part of people's lives. There a number of reasons that contribute to this progressive focus on education. A simple reason might be its crucial role in children's future career. In the past, you would notice a number of people even though performing well at their careers did not have a university degree. Consequently, the companies did not have such penchant to compare different employees since they were equally adept by being trained by themselves. However, the variety of facilities for students to continue their education have increased the number of graduates which are hoping to be absorbed by a distinguished company. The intense competition permits the more ingenious students to overcome. Parents know this situation can hamper their children's opportunities and feel worried about what would happen to them in the future. That is why they do their best to motivate him to put all his efforts into excelling at school in order to be qualified enough to find a good career.
A further more subtle point is that nowadays a number of distractions hinder student's learning. Parents are aware that one of the adverse effects of the rapid pace of technology is attracting students' attention and making them more reluctant to focus on their studies. To illustrate more, a mother cannot withstand perpetual complains of his son's teacher regarding his poor performance in mathematics for example. Not only does she know his son not study at all, but also she has warned him several times that he will be punished if he keeps playing computer games and surfing the Internet. Knowing that imposing obligations by getting his mobile phone or computer from him do not work, she and her husband decide to motivate their son by a number of rewards or other persuasive means. They indirectly try to make him interested in playing outside rather than sitting in front of the computer by inspiring him that socializing with other children is so beneficial, and he can make lots of friends and have more fun. Therefore, they can divert some of his attention to other things rather than computer and cell phone in the hope of providing more incentive for him to study hard.
To summarize, the increasing importance of education and a vast range of distractions in children's concentration have made it inevitable for parents to deal with their education more precisely. It is high time we stopped overlooking the fact that children in the past were not confronted with a lot of things which enabled them to study well without being under the supervision of parents. Parents know how the situation has altered and are doing all their best to lead a successful life for their children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ens opportunities and feel worried about what would happen to them in the future....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, regarding, so, therefore, well, for example, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 86.0 52.1666666667 165% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2667.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 535.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98504672897 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80937282943 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72855969233 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515887850467 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 831.6 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4408436133 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.227272727 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3181818182 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.81818181818 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258601549772 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792284196826 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595645940813 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18569459843 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0670192871781 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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