Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
"People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment - doing things they like to do - rather than doing things they should do."
There is no doubt today that people have better and more variety of ways to spend their personal time. In my opinion, it is not always spent on their desires and fun. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, modern developments have reduced unnecessary wastage of time. In the olden days, a lot of efforts were used on tiring labour for even simple tasks. Today many such tasks are automated thanks to technology. Compared to olden days where books needed to scourged for days to search something, today information is readily available and a click away on Google. In my own experience, I use calculators for fast calculations, phones as an alternative of letters for better communication, airplanes to reduce time spent in transit. This shows that people can now assign this extra free time for hobbies, pleasure activities, work or any productive task. Making a recreational use of time is also something which researchers suggest one should do to avoid stress and depression. In addition, given how readily the economy and various fields of science are flourishing suggests that the educated people are using their education and invested time to contribute further on to advancements.
Secondly, a case can also be made that as the state of technology has advanced, the burdens of individuals has reached higher levels too. Compared to olden days, one needs to earn more money and be more financially stable to stay afloat, given the rising inflation. Many people have to work two- three jobs to earn enough for their families. Work culture has also become highly competitive and stressful. Employees are expected to work and stay in the office more than required. If anyone leaves on time, they are judged. The extra time gained due to technological advances is spent on working more instead of spending it on recreation.
In conclusion, I believe that people in this age have a greater amount of time at their disposal but are not necessarily wasting it. This is because they mostly use it for recreational activities which is productive for better mental health, and at work because of recent work culture developments.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1822.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9781420765 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75734369464 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573770491803 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8895092068 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114418070068 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0346807462696 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.03873823067 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0654287831647 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0184143224123 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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