Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: people today spend too much time on personal enjoyment - doing things they like to do - rather than doing things they should do.
In the past few years, people spent more and more time on things for fun. And there are several signs to indicate this trend. Many of them came from the development of technologies. As the technologies progress, there are much more distractions around us, compare with decades ago.
For example, with high performance of the processor within the smartphone, we can do a lot of things, which we can not imagine back then. Shopping on the phone was never easier than today. we can swipe and tap on the screen to shop almost everything you want in anywhere. You do not even have to get up from bed to order a dress from China. And this also cause a big problem. With this kind of convenience, people tend to count on their phone more and more. And just as the many analysis agree, most of the time people spent on their phone were not for work.
The popularity of social networks could also supports the idea of people spending too much time doing things for personal enjoyment. It is not hard to find that many people enjoy their second life on Facebook. Hundreds of selfies, thousands of clips were being upload to Facebook per minute. Moreover, according to researches being published recently, the number of the so-called creators was growing insanely. More and more people waste their time taking pictures of themselves or of the food everyday. What could be worse is that this situation are somewhat getting severe after Instagram was introduced to the public in the 2010s.
Additionally, working time was being reduced by the law due to the improvement of the environment for labor force. This did not help the situation at all. The reduction of working time means the growing of off-work time. What people do in their off-work time are not anything other than being relax.
So, due to the reasons above, I may assume that people surely waste too much time on somethings that are not productive. The ubiquitous of internet along with social network and smartphone make our life more entertain. But it brings us to a dangerous self-indulgence ground that might not be reversible.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: We
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Suggestion: many analyses
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Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...book per minute. Moreover, according to researches being published recently, the number of...
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, for example, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78453038674 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56253701486 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555248618785 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.5858538733 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.1666666667 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0833333333 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.83333333333 5.45110844103 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2199470132 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0550153568027 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073659618635 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114273118548 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398380629554 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.85 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.