Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Recently, people involved with many life struggles and obviously plenty of problems and issues surrounding everyone in this mechanized and Planned world. most of the people forced to do many things which it is not their inherent desire. In this regard, there is a long-standing discussion among the experts about whether nowadays people doing enjoyable things they like do or doing things they should do. However, most of us know that in this decades must be in a determined route in order to have a normal life. Accordingly, I strongly disagree with the statement and in the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint through three notable reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that most of the people have more one job in order to gain adequate money for their life. These days because of economic condition equivalence between the price of goods and peoples income is not balanced. Not only people cannot have or do whatever they want but also they must live with at least desires. For instance, My father is an employee and after eight-hour work in the office, he going to work in a market shop just because of money, not for the enjoyable reason.
The second important point which deserves some words is that in this decade time is a most valuable thing among people. because of miscellaneous works and compressed schedule, no one has enough time to do whatever they want and enjoy of that. in order to make their life stable, their personal enjoyment doings will be decreased. A very tangible example is myself, for the preparing for the TOEFL test I studied English ten hours in a day and it was a tough situation for me because if I wanted to do anything except studying English I lost my time and result was my defeat.
To put it briefly, if one weighs the merits and demerits of the aforementioned statements, one soon realizes that not only people cannot spend too much time on personal enjoyments doing but also they have to decrease rest of their little enjoyments because of the harsh situation of this decades.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, briefly, but, first, however, if, second, so, at least, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78151260504 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58269989037 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543417366947 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.8368571139 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.928571429 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21428571429 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375025593561 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129697608812 0.076458572812 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134689535871 0.0737576698707 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234408187324 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0921559172687 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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