Do you agree or disagree with the following statements？ Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Relax individuals are a crucial part of our society. Every perosn has different characteristic when do anything without paying attention to its results. Some people believe that if everyone want to do their job well, they should do one thing sole, while others hold the opposite view. In my view, everybody should do only specific task instead of several things together for two noticeable reasons.
The main reason is that when people do so many different jobs simultaneously, they could be distracted. The majority of individual's brain have low level of capasity for doing various tasks at the same time. This cause people to try focusing on them and so their brain can not analyze quickly that harm to works. For example, when I was in high scool, my familay was poor and needed more money in order to subsist. Unfortunately, I had to work as worker in shopping beside on my studying. When I went to school every day, I was overwhelming about not only how to afford my famly's expense but also how to work in shopping to earn more monemy. This events cause me to distrate from class and hurted my grade. In addition, when I was at work in the evening, I was anxeious about my schooling. Consequently, this led me to fire from my work. Therefore, if I was just student, I could progress faster.
The another reason is that when people want to do several taks altogether, they face the lack of sufficient time and make severe mistake. Daily time is limited and is the important part to do things. If anyone want to do diverse jobs in limited time, they should be hurry that lead to miss concetration and make harmful mistake. For instance, when my friend was in high school, he decided to enter the best university. He registered in several extra classes in the afternoon beside his school at the morning. Clearly, he even did not have enough time to manage these numerous classes. Also, at the night he had to study harder so as to cover whole content whether his school or added classes. Subsequently, these events force him to stay up late at the night like nocture. Unfortunately, in the end of semester, he failed passingnot olny his exams in school but also entrance test for entering to univeristy. This experience taught me that it is better to do one task instead of several of them.
In conclusion, I personality prefer to do one job well instead of doing different task mistakely because of distracting my braing and limitation of time. We should concentrate on a things if we want to do well and progress quickly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 43, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...e main reason is that when people do so many different jobs simultaneously, they could be dist...
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Line 5, column 642, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...o work in shopping to earn more monemy. This events cause me to distrate from class ...
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Line 9, column 211, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'anyone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
... important part to do things. If anyone want to do diverse jobs in limited time, the...
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Line 9, column 267, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'hurried'?
Suggestion: hurried
...se jobs in limited time, they should be hurry that lead to miss concetration and make...
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Line 9, column 628, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...so, at the night he had to study harder so as to cover whole content whether his school ...
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Line 15, column 180, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a thing' or simply 'things'?
Suggestion: a thing; things
...ation of time. We should concentrate on a things if we want to do well and progress quic...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2097.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69127516779 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66741164916 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527964205817 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.399739362 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.6538461538 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1923076923 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96153846154 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22609243086 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0658899028776 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0819417873796 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173721461249 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0706780703883 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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