Do you agree or disagree with the following statements? It is better to spend money on something that lasts a long time, such as an expensive piece of jewellery than on something that provides short-term pleasure, such as a vacation.
Everyone has their own priorities when it comes to spend money, but in every case people want to spend money wisely, after all they earn it with great hard work and time. Personally, I do agree with the statement that it is better to spend money on things that lasts a long time than on things which provide short-term pleasure.
First of all, it is always better to plan for the long term goals of life, this is what my perspective is towards life. This opinion is also similar in case of money. Indeed, money plays a vital role in everybody's life, without which our survival is almost impossible. If money has such an importance in our life, how can people think of wasting it in short-term pleasures?. We spend a lot of time of our lives just to earn money, so it is always a smart action to spend it wisely. My own experience is a good example for that. When I passed out from high school, my parents had two options, either to spend money on my college education or to or organize a grand party for my sister's wedding. My parents took decision to spend money on my eduction, due to which, today I am a successful engineer. My parents are retired now, I am bearing the whole family living cost by my earnings. This decision had a long term planning of my career and future, which paid them off.
Secondly, your future might be in trouble if you keep on wasting your money on short term pleasure things. "Future can not be predicted" who knows what will happen to you in the coming years or in future. You might not have any job, you might get some serious disease, you may caught with accident etc. People have these kinds of uncertainties throughout their life. To avoid worse conditions in these situations, they need money. If they have saving, they can easily overcome such drastic situations of their life.
Above all, some might be of the opinion that spending money on short-term things is a better option as these things provide them ample experiences in life. But what if they do not have money tomorrow even to fulfil their basic needs?. Hence, you can only live a smart life if you learned to spend your money smartly.
In summary, I strongly believe that It is better to spend money on something that lasts a long time, such as an expensive piece of jewellery than on something that provides short-term pleasure, such as a vacation. This is because, it not only helps you to invest money wisely, but also improves you future.
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Essay evaluation report
Everyone has their own priorities
Everyone has his own priorities
People have their own priorities
My parents took decision
My parents took a decision
My parents are retired now, I am bearing the whole family living cost by my earnings.
My parents are retired now, and I am bearing the whole family living cost by my earnings. //sentence A, and/but/or sentence B
improves you future.
improves your future.
Sentence: My parents took decision to spend money on my eduction, due to which, today I am a successful engineer.
Error: eduction Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: But what if they do not have money tomorrow even to fulfil their basic needs?.
Error: fulfil Suggestion: fulfill
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flaws:
the main issue is:
No. of Words: 444 while No. of Different Words: 214 . it means it is wordy. some words/sentences are duplicated.
We are expecting:
No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 444 350
No. of Characters: 1943 1500
No. of Different Words: 214 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.59 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.376 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.276 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.182 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.469 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.513 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.178 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 205, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ll happen to you in the coming years or in future. You might not have any job, you might ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, after all, in short, in summary, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2022.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55405405405 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43423356739 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495495495495 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8281936763 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.9130434783 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3043478261 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04347826087 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378938204652 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106994757729 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154800643582 0.0737576698707 210% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268059584538 0.150856017488 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.184856135932 0.0645574589148 286% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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