Do you agree or disagree? Working at home using computer and telephone is better than working in an office.
Work can be done anywhere either in office or at home, but what matters to me is whether it is been done in right direction or it is been done just for the sake of completing the task. Personally, I disagree with the statement that working at home using computer and telephone is better than working in an office. I feel this way for two main reasons.
First of all, as per a saying in India "work is worship", when you do any work, you should do it with as much dedication and love as you show it during worship. From my perspective, when you work in office, you get an environment to do it with your whole sincerity and concentration. However, at home you can easily get distracted due to a number of factors like family issues, television, guests, children, pets etc. My own experience is a good example for that. Few months back, I got leg fracture, due to which I had to do my work from home as I could not go to office. It was like an arduous task for me to do it at home because of myriad of distractions and unfavorable work environment. Since, I am a kind of person who love to work with all her efforts to get the desired results, nevertheless it was not possible for me to give my best.
Secondly, office environment and culture help you in improving your work performance. If you are highly motivated and dedicated towards you work, it will not only proliferate your significance in the job, but also provide you with social respect and recognition. It it very necessary to have social honor in the society we live. For instance, last year I got promotion to a higher level administrative position in my company because of my extraordinary performance in increasing the sales of the company. Moreover, it helped me to gain respect in our community, because of this respect and honor of our family in the society, both of my children got admission in top schools of our area.
Above all, some might be of the opinion that work from home is better option because they get freedom and flexibility in their work. In may be true to some extent, but I think, work need discipline and focus, which you can get only whwn you go office to work. Also, I would like to mention about a research conducted by CSR institute in India, the discovered result suggests that people who work from home are less efficient in their work then who work from office.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that working at home using computer and telephone is better than working in an office. This is because toy can work with full sincerity and potential as well as you can get recognition in the society.
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Essay evaluation report
in right direction
in a right direction
in right directions
is better option
is a better option
in their work then who work from office.
in their work than those who work from office.
Sentence: In may be true to some extent, but I think, work need discipline and focus, which you can get only whwn you go office to work.
Error: whwn Suggestion: when
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flaws:
1. a lot of sentences start with pronouns like: 'you', 'I' , 'it'..., try to remove them as much as possible, for example:
If you are highly motivated and dedicated towards you work, it will not only proliferate your significance in the job, but also provide you with social respect and recognition.
revised:
High motivations and dedications towards work will not only proliferate the significance in the job, but also provide social respects and recognition.
2, try not to use 'you'. replace it with 'we', 'I' ... maybe. some examiners may not like 'you'. sounds like you are giving people a lesson. for example:
From my perspective, when you work in office, you get an environment to do it with your whole sincerity and concentration.
better to be:
From my perspective, when I/we work in office, I/we get an environment to do it with my/our whole sincerity and concentration.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 473 350
No. of Characters: 2062 1500
No. of Different Words: 221 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.664 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.359 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.572 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.895 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.006 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.36 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.566 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.206 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vated and dedicated towards you work, it will not only proliferate your significa...
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Line 5, column 265, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: It
...ou with social respect and recognition. It it very necessary to have social honor in ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, well, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2139.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5221987315 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71562157179 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490486257928 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1157123406 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.95 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.65 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.65 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.501251240931 0.236089414692 212% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.171244936229 0.076458572812 224% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.188056951765 0.0737576698707 255% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.316512737218 0.150856017488 210% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128366350573 0.0645574589148 199% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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