TPO-48 - Integrated Writing Task
The lecture and the reading are about the threatening of frog habitats. The reading suggests several methods to protect them from endanger. However, the professor casts doubt on what is presented in the text and refuses every of the methods given in the reading. He does not feel that these methods are as beneficial as the author assumes.
First of all, the lecturer states that prohibition of pesticides use in farm will be very costly to the farmers. Farmers use these pesticides to protect their crop from insects, and thus they can produce large amount of crops. If the prohibition law will be implemented to those farm lands which are near to the frog habitat, then farmers of these lands will be under great loss. Their crop yield will be lesser than the farms which are away from frog habitat. Hence, this method is not an effective one and would cause a great deal of expense.
Secondly, the lecturer contends that skin fungus treatments are not logical at all. The treatments require to treat single frog at a time. To capture a frog and treat it with medication does not make sense. Furthermore, these treatments do not pass on to next generation, so they should be applied to every generation of frogs, which makes this method a complicated one.
Finally, the lecturer mentions that the major cause of threatening of frog habitats is global warming and not the human activities. Measures to protect the wetlands by reducing the use of water by human beings will not work in protecting the frog species.
In conclusion, lecturer refutes the methods mentioned in reading. This is because prohibition of pesticides use in farm will be very costly, skin fungus treatments are complicated methods and the major cause of threatening of frog habitats is global warming.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
to protect them from endanger.
to protect them from danger.
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flaws:
1. No. of Words: 302 250
Write the essay in 20 minutes.
2. doesn't need a conclusion paragraph. better to have 4 paragraphs:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 12
No. of Words: 302 250
No. of Characters: 1440 1200
No. of Different Words: 146 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.169 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.768 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.499 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.765 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.504 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.529 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.317 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.568 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 108, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'treating'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: treating
... logical at all. The treatments require to treat single frog at a time. To capture a fro...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 30.3222958057 142% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1487.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 302.0 270.72406181 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9238410596 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58589767858 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493377483444 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 450.0 419.366225166 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.4757147151 49.2860985944 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4705882353 110.228320801 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7647058824 21.698381199 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47058823529 7.06452816374 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373971572178 0.272083759551 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125055816491 0.0996497079465 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0834021292149 0.0662205650399 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21746625467 0.162205337803 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0650279620274 0.0443174109184 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.3589403974 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 12.2367328918 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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