Do you agree or disagree with the following statements?
Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By compairing today's lifestyle with the one maybe a hundred years ago it is obvious that people work more. Today's lifestyle is more complicated than it was before and consequently individuals are responsible for a variety of affairs. As some may say living in present age is easier and people are able to do whatever they do perfect, others may think vice versa. Frankly, as far as I am concerned now a days things are done more careless and without paying attention to details. Among myriads reasoning I will delve into most conspicuous ones which made me to put forward this claim.
First and foremost, by looking at each individual we can conclude that every one are after making money so the more the work, the more the income. But working more results in less concentration on each line of work as consequently the outcome would not be without flaw. An example can illustrate my point. I myself am working in three different places. During the day I am working as a technical supporter in a company and my job is answering to phones while at night I study to accuire a master degree in industrial engineering. As for weekends I work as a wood crafter. All these different and seprate lines of works need attention to do it perfect but while I am working as a supporter my mind is thinking about how to write my thesis in correct hierarchy but when I am at home I suddenly recall that I had to call someone at work. Since all these disturbance bother my concentration, I can not do any of them perfectly.
Another point one should take for this significant is we sould respond to different people and each of them asks us for something within a limited time. This will cause in imperfection as we have to allocate a limited amount of time to more. An instance accounts what I mean better. My father is an employee in PANHA company and he works as an engineer. He told me that he can work at most ten hours a day but while he is in the company doing his daily routin his boss comes to his office and asks him to design a new instrument which needs at least twenty hours of work but the boss asks him to do it in four days. As a result my father work on it five hours per day for four starait day and lives him only another five hour to do his daily job. This means not doing the project perfect in order to finish it in time and also not doing his own job properly.
To wrap it up, all aforementioned reasons and examples advocate my claim that according to today's lifestyle people are more occupied and have less time to do anything correct and without flaws.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 398, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...ersa. Frankly, as far as I am concerned now a days things are done more careless and witho...
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Line 5, column 316, Rule ID: AM_I[1]
Message: Did you mean 'am I'?
Suggestion: am I
...ample can illustrate my point. I myself am working in three different places. Duri...
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Line 5, column 531, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...aster degree in industrial engineering. As for weekends I work as a wood crafter. ...
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Line 5, column 846, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this disturbance' or 'these disturbances'?
Suggestion: this disturbance; these disturbances
... had to call someone at work. Since all these disturbance bother my concentration, I can not do a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, frankly, if, look, may, so, while, as for, at least, i mean, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2102.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40670859539 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53985456452 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507337526205 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.0456638218 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.095238095 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7142857143 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95238095238 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159675421082 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0478962985666 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484479114819 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109240734967 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0186646116103 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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