Do you agree or disagree with the following statements?
Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.
In today’s world, people are facing to lots of majors or field of any expertise, entertainment, sports, and etc. They love to participate in "all" of them without any limitation but unfortunately they cannot follow them, so they decide to choose some of them. As far as I am concerned, living through this way not only reduce the quality of our job or duty, but hurt them also. In this regard, there are lots of reasons, two of which are of great importance in comparison to others, which are elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, for doing anything in correct way and also with the highest quality and minimizing the erroneous, each individual must have enough concentration. Nowadays, people made themselves as busier as they can, so much so that not only cannot they focus on their job, but also they forgot their families. For example, doctors of whom are great importance job, usually participate in lots of business such as trading or having lots of assets. Bu doing so, they never can concentrate on their expertise as much as they can, so it may hurt all society not only doctor-classes. Unfortunately, in most of the jobs the circumstances are as same as doctors. in this situation, who can expect a development country? Who can trust on doctors or other prominent people?
Secondly, if all of which mentioned above is incorrect, who will manage the time limitation to do his- or himself best to achieve their goals? It is crystal clear that, our time is limit and it is worthwhile to do something that will be remained after death. A saying comes to mind, which is equivalent in English, "Doing one thing for thousands is better than doing one thing for just once". A person by spending enough time just in one major can build a majestic “tower” of his- or herself. Time is a priceless commodity, the more time on a subject, the more quality will be gained. Lots of fabulous individuals namely Bill Gates, Steve Jobs, and Varen Baft, to name but a handful, finds their way and spend all their times on it and did a feat art. Consequently, time is the fuel of burning the coal, coal is job, who do not want to have hottest "coal"?
All in all, people, in today's world, are running as fast as they can to gain more money, or being more successful. With this in mind, it is normal most of them want to examine many ways to find the best way. But they are just surveying in a "fiction", and when they will awake, they understand the best way is just focusing and spending time in one way to fortify their power and achieve their zenith.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 110, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...f any expertise, entertainment, sports, and etc. They love to participate in 'all&a...
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Line 1, column 388, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...ality of our job or duty, but hurt them also. In this regard, there are lots of reas...
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Line 3, column 205, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...adays, people made themselves as busier as they can, so much so that not only cann...
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Line 3, column 658, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...e circumstances are as same as doctors. in this situation, who can expect a develo...
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Line 7, column 240, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...est way. But they are just surveying in a 'fiction', and when they will...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2156.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70742358079 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88505207679 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506550218341 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 667.8 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.897498318 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.666666667 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8095238095 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182036586123 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0534746049485 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539608892364 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107137904531 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468755562818 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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