Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Some lessons for young students （5~8 years old）increase their interest to learn，including video games. But some people believe it will distract young students.
Today with the galloping growth rate of technology no one can turn a blind eye to the significant effects of video games on children. Some people believe that these video games can distract children’s focus, on the other extreme of the rope, others deeply think that various video games can increase children’s interests to learn. Although both sides take their positions, personally speaking, I believe that the second group carries more weight. In the following paragraph, I will explain my reasons.
As the first and paramount reason, children can learn new knowledge and gain valuable experiences when playing various and different video games. In other words, they can find out their interests by playing these games that can help them select their favorite science. Actually, if children select their interests and put a lot of effort to improve their performance at it, they can develop their knowledge and expand their horizons. For instance, video games that are about completing various missions encourage children to deal efficiently with various problems and unprecedented challenges about a secret project. During these games, children should accomplish several projects. Consequently, children learn to fulfill their takes and duties properly and efficiently in their lives.
The second reason coming to my mind to substantiate my viewpoint is, video games with interesting designs and graphics provide a wide range of opportunities for children to select their future jobs. For example, research conducted by Ph.D. psychology students at a university shows that children who play video games about car racing or motor racing have more interest to be a diver in the future. In fact, when children play different video games, they try various opportunities and want to select their interests. Hence, these video games have undeniable influences on children future and performances.
In conclusion, not only do video games not distract the concentration of young students but also they can develop their knowledge and help them to be creative and find viable solutions and pragmatic approaches for various problems. Also, students learn to try hard to achieve their goals and complete their tasks effectively.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, second, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1890.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44668587896 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80218431925 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541786743516 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6390341094 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.125 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6875 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.125 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229573110446 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805276172397 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0388043515507 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153736021384 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0306875486633 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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