Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Today's world is more competitive and people are so busy with their work. In this busy world, parents do not get enough time to spend with their child. In my opinion, parents should spend time with their children by playing games or sports rather than school-related work. I feel this way for several reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, sports, games or other outdoor activities will help the parents to make a connection with the children. They should spend their quality time with their children by making something fun that will be memorable for them. For example, childhood is the most precious moment for every person. If the child spends time with something enjoyable in the near future he/she will remember his/her feel very happy by remembering.
Secondly, by playing with them parents can understand the mental growth of the kids. Also, they can teach their children while playing like various computer teaching game is now available for this purpose. For instance, one of my friend's daughter who does not like to study but interested in game. A counting game was brought by my friend and she is very interested in this game. In the end, she knows how to count and how to spell those word. Therefore, in this way, parents could use their quality time with the children and helps to develop mental growth.
Thirdly, sports or other outdoor activities essential for the health and growth of the children. Since the teacher concentrates on the knowledge of the children and spends less time doing exercise to improve student body condition. So, after the school parents can pay attention to the exercise. Moreover, children can feel free from schoolwork. If parents also give pressure for doing the academic work children could feel stress which is not good for physical condition.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that sports or game is the better option for spending time with the children which is also developing the family connection and mental growth of the children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...tion and mental growth of the children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1698.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00884955752 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43880918095 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522123893805 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7192603828 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.9 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.95 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.95 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321613407432 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106282102025 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0832476326145 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19992492183 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579719597288 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.85 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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