Do you agree or disagree with following statements?
The telephone has a greater influence on people's lives than television.
New technologies made our lives more convenient than the past. Recent innovations in communication changed our lives in a good way. Even though they create some problems for us, but their benefits far outweigh their drawbacks. Some people are of the opinion that television has a greater effect on us than the telephone while others hold a different point of view. I insist that both of them are essential for our society and it is hard to imagine our world without them. In the following, I am willing to support my perspective by proposing two main arguments.
First and the foremost reason lies in the fact that telephone brought us together. We use it to communicate with each other. If the telephone did not exist, we could lose our connection with lots of people including our friends and relatives. It reduced the transportation costs by eliminating unnecessary transportations. For example, my family lived in Birjand. In the meantime, I was studying in Mashhad which was far away from Birjand. Whenever I had a problem in those days, I called my family and they could help me to solve it. Otherwise, they always were worried about my conditions and it could dissuade me from pursuing further study.
Another subtle factor rests on the notion that television has a significant influence on the information dissemination and businesses. There are lots of businesses which are highly dependent on the television, acting, advertisement, news agencies and so forth. In addition, television brings us peace because in today's world, if something happened around the world, people would be informed and would help each other to solve it. I remember that about twelve years ago, an earthquake occurred in my country. Then, the whole country and other countries contributed to managing the situation. In that case, television played a crucial role in the disaster. It leads that people feel empathy for survivors.
To sum up, I would like to point out that comparing television and telephone is as well as comparing apple and oranges. As a result, we need both them and if we removed each of them from our community, it would cause scores of problems for us. Not only does the telephone lower the costs but television also creates various businesses and propagates information among people. Furthermore, the basic technology in both of them is very similar. However, I concede that we should use them in a good way, otherwise, they could cause problems for us.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 552, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'were'.
Suggestion: were always
...ld help me to solve it. Otherwise, they always were worried about my conditions and it coul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, well, while, for example, in addition, as a result, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2057.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9927184466 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86443452607 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555825242718 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.7141681515 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.1153846154 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8461538462 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88461538462 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113680425588 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0306720222388 0.076458572812 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0393833375934 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.067806951911 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292427185005 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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