Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
To remain happy and optimistic when you fail is more important than achieving success.
Optimism is a determining element of success. People work hard to fulfill their goals. If they lost their hope, they would stop working. Some people are of the opinion that being optimistic in failure has a greater priority while others hold an opposite opinion. I insist that having a positive attitude in failures is more important than achieving our goals. I concede that our satisfaction is directly related to our achievements. But, our attitude specifies our happiness, not the outcomes. On the other hand, success has a wide definition and everyone can look at it with a different point of view. In the following, I am willing to support my perspective by proposing two main arguments.
First and the foremost reason lies in the fact that happiness is the ultimate goal of life. People take part in various activities to satisfy their needs and wants. By fulfilling our goals, we become satisfied and exalted. This internal pleasure urges us to work hard. Furthermore, success gets its meaning in according to failure. If it was possible for people to become successful, then it would lose its value. In that case, there is nothing in the world that could make us happy. I admit that it is impossible to be happy in every circumstance, but it is possible to remain positive in difficulties. For instance, I have a friend who hardly becomes disappointed. He believes that he does his best, and whatever happens would be great. In fact, he accepts his limitations. This view helps him to size up his outcome according to his constraints. Therefore, by changing our attitudes we can be happy in the failures and prepare ourselves for future.
Another subtle factor rests on the notion that having a positive attitude is a prerequisite for success. If we lose our hope, we would stop our efforts. Some failures are necessary for success. For example, when I was in university, I and several of my friends formed a team and participated in a competition. In the last stage of the competition, most of us were desperate since we couldn't fulfill the requirements, but, one of my friends was so optimistic. We were sure that we would lose, however, he held his hope and continued his efforts. Finally, we won the competition due to his resistance. In that case, I learned that happiness can make us successful. It is said that Tomas Edison failed several times, but finally, invent the bulb. Accordingly, optimism is necessary for success.
To sum up, I would like to point out that being optimistic when we fail has a pivotal role in our success. We should know that in the real world, it is not possible for us to acquire whatever we want. Accordingly, we have to save our self-conscience in the failures. Not only do we want to become happy in every moment of our lives but happiness is also a propulsion for becoming successful.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, look, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in fact, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 86.0 43.0788530466 200% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2351.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79795918367 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87063070011 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508163265306 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 753.3 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 9.59856630824 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 36.0 20.6003584229 175% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.9954113304 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 65.3055555556 100.406767564 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6111111111 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 32.0 11.8709677419 270% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107828621609 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0274115493064 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387335650317 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0719786858335 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0229461136007 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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