Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
The most critical question that challenging the parents and the educators ( who is having the great influence on the kids and how we can control the bad impact from some friends). actually, the students influenced by both their teachers and their friends but which one is dominant? the teacher's effect or the friend's effect. Personally, I think the friend influence is a way more than the teacher's influence.
The students spend a lot of time with their friends, they talk about everything, about the studying, playing, personal issues, because they are in the same age and they already have the same problem and the same challenges. It is pretty obvious that the kids or the teenagers feel more comfortable and more relaxed when they chatting with their friends, besides, their feeling of security and safety because they are trusting their friends rather than any person in the world even their parents, I remember when I was in the high school, I talked with my friend approximately all the day even when we go back home after school, we keep talking by phone, so for sure it would be strong relationship, Sometimes the kids consider their teacher as friend, if the teacher know how to deal with them and how to make them trust him, just in this case the teachers influence probably would be equal the the friend influence.
The other thing that makes the students affect each other strongly is the absence of judgment about their behaviours, even if they did a mistake, because their friend are so resilient and so empathic with them, in contrast, the teacher and the parents used to critics the kids, this attitude of the adults is so understandable, for sure they are caring and concerning about their kids and students, but in fact, this behaviour are pushing the kids towards their friends more and more. So if the teachers want to have a good impact on their students life, they had to stop critics and just feel the problems and tried to solve them together, I remember my history teacher in the middle school and how she was too nice and to concern about us and about our problems, indeed, we consider her as our best friend and she really had a tremendous influence on my life.
in sum, with that being said, all the parents and teachers wish that they have the same influence on their kids and students as their friends, unfortunately, that would not happen unless they change their attitude toward the kids and trying to deal with them as grown ups and stop advising and critics them all the time, that may help the kids to trust the adult and then the teachers and the parents may help their kids and students and share their experience with them, as long with that, they can protect them from doing mistakes and eliminate the influence of the bad friends.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, if, may, really, so, then, as to, i think, in contrast, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 33.0 13.8261648746 239% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2284.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 488.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68032786885 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37827483947 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438524590164 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 54.0 20.1344086022 268% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 222.7469915 48.9658058833 455% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 253.777777778 100.406767564 253% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 54.2222222222 20.6045352989 263% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 5.45110844103 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360367928529 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.178289428783 0.076458572812 233% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0950783388029 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264449381918 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364829386763 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 27.7 11.7677419355 235% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.05 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.8 10.1575268817 205% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.75 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 23.6 10.0537634409 235% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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