Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students should not take part-time jobs while they are
studying in universities.
By and large, students are the most important parts of any society, because they are building the future of a country. In this hectic era, there are more and more pressures on students; they should be as successful as they can in their studies while they are managing all aspects of their life, such as financial ones. There are some ways to help students: scholarships and part-time jobs. In this regard, many controversies usually arise whether students should not take part-time jobs while they are studying in universities. Although many people think that part-time jobs can not benefit students, personally, I am of the idea that part-time jobs are lucrative for students. In the following lines, I will present and investigate two reasons to substantiate my response.
The first reason is that students can afford their needs. In other words, students usually deal with a lot of problems to manage their sources of money; they should pay their tuition, buy books, pay for their housing, pay for their foods, etc. If they have an extra source of money, for example, an income from a part-time job, they will be able to overcome many of those problems. Also, students are not expected to decrease their study time, but they are expected to reduce their leisure time, which they usually spend on partying or hanging out, so it could not cause any bad effect on their education. For example, consider a university student that works part-time in a library after school hours, s/he will gain enough money to overcomes at least some of the economic problems that s/he has. If s/he does not work, s/he may not be able to manage financial issues in a good way.
The second reason of equal importance is that students will get a job sooner in their future life. It goes without saying that today, employers tend to employ who has work experiences before. Students who work part-time during their unversities will have a better chance of getting a job. In comparison, who do not have any work experience, will not be employed easily after graduation or will not be paid fairly in the first years of work. To illustrate, in the same example, the student with a job experience could fulfill the work experience criteria of many job vacancies. Also, s/he could be able to introduce some people as references from previous work,so s/he will have a better chance of getting a job. If s/he did not work part-time when s/he was at university, s/he would not be able to find a job quickly.
To bring everything to a conclusion, having analyzed the reasons above, one could surmise that the benefits of a part-time job during university outweigh its drawbacks. Because not only are students able to respond to their needs but also they could gain work experience.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 754, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...gain enough money to overcomes at least some of the economic problems that s/he has. If s/h...
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Line 5, column 660, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , so
... people as references from previous work,so s/he will have a better chance of getti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, while, at least, for example, such as, by and large, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2284.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82875264271 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54468532273 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490486257928 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 705.6 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5871166137 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.761904762 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5238095238 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04761904762 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274967804526 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0955380571217 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752018612868 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181880758798 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0847692417259 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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