Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
IIProfessional athletes, such as football and basketball
players, do not deserve the high salaries that they are
paid.
By and large, in todays era, professional athletes are of great position in any society since the sport convert to a bussiness, they are the people who lead this bussinesses.Also, leaders of big bussinesses, they usually are paid high salaries and they are always under the magnifying glass. In this regard,some controversies always arise whether they deserve the high salaries or not. Although many people think that the professional athletes do not deserve the high salaries that they are paid, personally, I believe that they definitely merit it. In the following lines, I will present and investigate two reasons to substantiate my response.
The first reason is that professional ones of every sport field, devote their life to sport. In other words, they should practice long hours a day for a long time, and these practices usually are usually in places such as camps that also bring about that the athletes be seprated from their families. Likewise, they deal with sport from a very little age, that inhibit them to study like others. While every one find their position in the society as a result of their studies, as doctors or engineers, these athletes definitely should see the outcomes of their hard work and efforts with a high salaries. For instance, consider a child boy who really like football and want to be a professional one in the future, he should be present in group practices and allocate much time to his sport field to could be a good one in the future. This can cause a dropin his educational level, and eventually, he will not continue his study. In the future, he should be valued for all these efforts and hardship that he sustained.
The second noteworthy reason that confirms athletes should be paid high salaries is that they could get irrecoverable injuries. All careers has their own risks, but hardly do they cause any major problem for people's health. Whereas, sport players are always suseptible to seroius injuries. More than all other bussinesses, sport is a competition, and in it people would injure each other even they do not really want to do. Moreover, many injuries can occure in a high and seroius degrees that can cause end of one's professional sport life. Because this types of injuries are not prophetic, these high salaries are not gauraneed for one's whole life. Therefore, these they should be paid fairly as long as they could paly. To illustrate, consider same example, the boy after withstanding long periods of being an amateur, when start to play as a professional one, can injure in second year of his professional life, and he do not have any other skill to could continue his life. Thus he should was paid drunig his period of prosperity that could continue his life for a while to could learn other skills.
In summary, having analyzed the reasons above, one could surmise that the professional athletes should have high incomes. Because not only do they sacrifice their life for sport but also they could be inhibited by hard injuries.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, likewise, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, thus, whereas, while, for instance, in summary, such as, as a result, by and large, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2498.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 511.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88845401174 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61999050452 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450097847358 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 783.9 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.1363467388 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.545454545 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2272727273 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.77272727273 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171424117967 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0616699507452 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0570256737805 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126057374009 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0594897259345 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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