Tpo24
The topic of the article as well as the lecture is the fossil of T. rex, which was a dinosaur lived70 million years ago; this fossil seems to contain residues of the animal's tissue. The writer explains that when the scientist intentionally had broken the T. rex's leg bone, they found some material there which resembles to blood vessels, red blood cells, and collagen matrix. On the contrary, the lecturer provides a number of counterarguments in its rejection.Initially, the writer asserts that researchers found many small branches inside the bone, whichwere assumed to be channels of the blood vessels; this idea had intensified when they found asoft material inside these channels which could represent remanets of the blood vessels. However, the speaker believes that a long time after an organism had died, bacteria colonizedin hollows behind trace of organic materials trace. So this soft material might be bacterial colonies, not parts of original animal.Second, the author states that results of experiments showed that there were some spheres with dark red centers, envolved of iron which plays a necessary role in blood cells. Yet again,the lecturer underscores that fossils of a primitive animal were found in the same site, which didn't have any red blood cells when they were alive. Therefore, this reddish material could be something else, for instance a red mineral.The final point of disagreement between the reading and the listening passage is collagen. The writer says that scientists had found collagen in the bone when they executed a test on it; Collagen is a fibrous protein that constitutes main part of alive bone tissue. In contrast, the lecturer explains that collagen never could be found in fossils older than 100 years ago, so finding collagen in the part of a fossil that lived 70 million years ago sounds to be contradictory. He thinks that because collagen can find in human skin, the collagen which was found in the test results must have come from a recent source such as skin of the researcher who was handling the bone.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 167, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'animals'' or 'animal's'?
Suggestion: animals'; animal's
...fossil seems to contain residues of the animals tissue. The writer explains that when t...
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Line 1, column 462, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Initially
...er of counterarguments in its rejection.Initially, the writer asserts that researchers fo...
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Line 1, column 964, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Second
... colonies, not parts of original animal.Second, the author states that results of expe...
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Line 1, column 1148, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...necessary role in blood cells. Yet again,the lecturer underscores that fossils of a ...
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Line 1, column 1244, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...imal were found in the same site, which didnt have any red blood cells when they were...
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Line 1, column 1382, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...ething else, for instance a red mineral.The final point of disagreement between the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, second, so, therefore, well, for instance, in contrast, such as, as well as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 22.0 12.0772626932 182% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 1373.03311258 125% => OK
No of words: 340.0 270.72406181 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71279647336 2.5805825403 105% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 145.348785872 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558823529412 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 419.366225166 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.726505918 49.2860985944 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.083333333 110.228320801 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3333333333 21.698381199 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 7.06452816374 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.09492273731 24% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.474191031688 0.272083759551 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168307726142 0.0996497079465 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0938492349922 0.0662205650399 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.474191031688 0.162205337803 292% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.3589403974 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 53.8541721854 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.0289183223 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 63.6247240618 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
Read sample essays from ETS:
http://www.testbig.com/users/toeflwritingmaster
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.