do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
television advertising directed towards young adult should not be allowed. Use specific reasons to support your answer
In the contemporary world, the broadcast has been playing a vital role in marketing, and it is often advertising a wide variety of products to attract customers, especially young children. As per my opinion, parent's should control their children to watch ads. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, the children not mature enough to analyze the quality of the product by seeing on the television; hence, they lose money. The advertisements on the broadcast look attractive and colorful and eye-catching to the children. If the product looks appealing, they don't think about the quality of the product and force their parents to buy. What's more, it ends up with the loss of money. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a child, almost at the age of five, we had a black and white television before we got smart Tv. Everyday evening, I used to watch All in the family, a comedy show, along with family. Between the program, it showed a wide variety of attractive toy cars, and whenever I saw those ads, I forced my parents to buy. First, they were trying to convince me, but I wasn't listening, and they bought a toy for me. After a few days, it broke, and it was a considerable loss.
Secondly, the advertisements on television negative impact on children, and deviate their concentration from studies. Young adults often addicted to announcements like war games, firing, and so on; as a result, they didn't concentrate on their studies and get the least marks. In addition to that, a few students try to mimic the ads in real life and end up with a hefty penalty. For instance, when I was a child, we used to stay in an apartment in Findlay, Ohio. My neighboring hose people had two children whose names were Alex and Felix. One day evening, Felix was beating his brother and said it was a game. He brother was crying, but still, he was doing the same. When I informed to their parents, they said, he used to watch resiling every day. If their parents control watching podcast, probably he wouldn't do that.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, for instance, i feel, in addition, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1723.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63172043011 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66623712071 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575268817204 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.8661883649 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0476190476 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7142857143 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0980809995059 0.236089414692 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0274510663128 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0218373411569 0.0737576698707 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.068764580579 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0114127598172 0.0645574589148 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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