Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The government should spend more money on improving access to the Internet than on public transportation.
Not surprisingly, money has long been as the cornerstone of every human society, furthermore, it has a tangible impact on people’s lives above all their communication. It is agreed that government should spend more money on improving access to the internet. Not only do people need to refine their life by communication on the ground that internet is a pivotal issue in today’s communication, but they also could implement it for gaining any kind of information.
The first noteworthy point that jots to my mind is the fact that communication is indisputable parts of today’s life and it could be implemented in a way that people have exact and safe contact with others. Needless to say that government should provide an environment which people could communicate with others. I think that illustrating example of my own experience can clarify this topic, my major is telecommunication and I know that how much communication is pervasive in today’s life like satellites or news agencies so we asked government to support one of our projects about antennas which it was proposed by me then they gave me a funding to continue my project and now my project is implemented in NASA. Accordingly, under no circumstance would we not ignore communication as an indispensable parts of today’s life especially people’s contacts with others.
Another reason which is worth mentioning is information has an unprecedented consequence on people’s lives and with information, their knowledge will be improved. It is all transparent that government should exploit some methods to exceed people’s knowledge and it has a salient impact on their life. I think that a small example of my family can give some light to this matter, my father all the time watch CNN and he use it with internet I remember a time that internet was gone and my father was sad he called internet supporter to fix this problem then internet was fixed and my father enjoyed news. Hence, I would rather the government should heed people’s source of information and support people’s life.
To put it in the nutshell, taking all the reasons which I provided in the previous paragraph bring us to the conclusion that no sooner does government spend more money on improving access to the Internet than they could communicate with others and they could well inform with lots of news and so on. It is high time all of us understood that in the next few years people will have tremendous penchant on the internet on the ground that population growth makes it feasible.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 429, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'uses'.
Suggestion: uses
...my father all the time watch CNN and he use it with internet I remember a time that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, so, then, well, i think, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.0752688172 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2149.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05647058824 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16359394417 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489411764706 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.8749356136 48.9658058833 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.307692308 100.406767564 165% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.6923076923 20.6045352989 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.69230769231 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190270552809 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100830239054 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148350678918 0.0737576698707 201% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142845299869 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.070295707827 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 11.7677419355 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.66 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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