Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history celebrities have played a prominent role in all societies.Due to its paramount importance they have some responsibilities for population of a country. some people may hold the view that they are important for all people of a society from babies to old people.However, some others may take an opposite view point and believe that they are more important for young people rather than older one. In my perspective they are hero for young people more and they can have effects on their attitude and the way of their thinking.Also they can guide them to right way or not.In following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my idea through two noticeable reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that young people have not a lot f experience and they no nothing about some thing that are secret in the world and they look for a person to imitate his lifestyle and be like him because their knowledge is limited and by following a famous person they feel more better and think they are doing right. for example, I my brother when he was a young boy liked to be a famous football player and was interested in Messi that is specialist in this field so he knew about him and his life very much even knew how much hours a day he practice and when go to sleep and when wake up. Indeed he tried to do what he did. as result Messi could have good effects on my brother and he could played good and because of his talent he accepted in a good team.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that old people are tiered and have to work for their life and earn money to live better but a young person have much more free time and can spend his leisure time on reading about a reputation person and comment on their information and lifestyle. even he can criticize from their function and play. and a young person is more creative and have the ability of searching on internet and find these people in social networks and see their posts so as a result, they will be a part of their life.The results of a study conducted in my country indicate that according to some interviews that have been done on several young and old person celebrities are more attractive for young people and they care about them and are very active on their page in the internet.and the older person have said that they should work and some of them are parents that have some duties for their children that limit their time for following other people life.
To make a long story short, famous people persons in a country are more important for young people and they like to look other people life to be like them and get their goals as like as them and filling their free time by sending comments on their events that established by themselves.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, so, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 34.0 13.8261648746 246% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2240.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48897795591 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40510686206 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.436873747495 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 711.9 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 45.0 20.1344086022 223% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 156.615494837 48.9658058833 320% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 203.636363636 100.406767564 203% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 45.3636363636 20.6045352989 220% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 6.36363636364 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141111098562 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641211522454 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530994610217 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103203238758 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350526702559 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.4 11.7677419355 190% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.5 10.1575268817 182% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.65 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 20.0 10.0537634409 199% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.247311828 185% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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