Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
teenager stage is immense critical stage. During this stage many physical, emotional, and anatomical changes take place besides, each person pass thriugh this stage in different grades and the society play a pivotal role in shaping of this stage. Accordingly we found young people todays more intersted in relevant subjects and entertainment with famous people than before in our days and this back to many reasons.
To begin with, young people want to show up themselves in front of their peers that they are have a wide acquaintance in famous people more than old people do. this can be tell due to they found these well-known people as their model in life and want to be like them in future while, the old people they believe they doing their roles in their life so not interest anymore what these famous people do. I remember my nephew love to listen to Justin piper the famous singer and he buy anything like clothes, jewelry, and hats have his name on it. He does so because he believed that all his peers will see him as interesting, educated about the style and the singer himself so his friends will follow him more.
In addition, today's thinking of the teenagers is much differs from old people. They are not sharing the same interest. Old people more interested in news, cultures, and medical knowledge in contrast, the younger are interest in music, sports, and technology. In view of the fact that this will not only affect their interest but also see these things in priority. My daughter is a good example of this. She loves to watch you tube for Jake pool "famous you tuber" she follow what he does in his show words by words while I even have no nothing about this person and when she want to explain to me what he is doing that makes her interest in keep watching his videos, i feel he's doing nothing important and verse versa when i want to explain to her my interest in other field like health she refuse to hear from me.
In sum, young people found famous entertainers and athletics more important than old people because they saw them their higher model in life and want to show in front of their friends plus, their thinking differ from the old people in their interest. I would like to give a piece of advice to the parents nowadays to keep their eyes open about what their teenagers interesting because some of those famous people may give a negative expression and their children will copy blindly
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...may give a negative expression and their children will copy blindly
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, if, may, so, well, while, i feel, in addition, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2012.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64665127021 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29599069372 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496535796767 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.8925942041 48.9658058833 200% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.133333333 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8666666667 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.06666666667 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177926514944 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649196203092 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0603548285422 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109304504328 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324734972746 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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