Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
We live in the age where the young generation is influenced by the famous personalities all over the world and try to imitate them. In my view, the opinions of the entertainers, athletes provoke young people the most as the youth today is the most focused among all. The effect of the celebrities is also more focused towards the young generation.
To begin with, I would say that the opinions of the celebrities and athletes are more important to young people as these famous personalities are the role models for the upcoming generation. Young people try to copy the different styles of the famous celebrities like the movie stars. Most of the young people try to copy the various kinds of sports and how the sportsperson play. Youth now is not only more towards their academic activities but are interesting in kinds of activities. They not only like to compete each other in their academics but also, the fashion, sports, and other entertainment sources. The present generation views these celebrities as their role models. The way these famous people live, types of clothes they wear, the cars and many more. For instance, my younger brother is ten years old. He is in elementary school. He is not only good in his academics but also in the sports. He loves to play cricket. He has his favourite cricketers whom he get inspired by. My brother not only tries to copy the way they play but also is more active on their social accounts. He copies the clothes they wear, the kinds of their haircuts. He often goes to watch the cricket match in the stadium and waits till the end for his favourite cricketer's speech. My brother often cooperates with us if we ask him to get something related to his game.
Secondly, I think that at present the greatest amount of the people active on the social media are the young people. Youth try to follow the celebrities, like the famous entertainers or the athletes not only on-screen but also offscreen. There are different sources of entertainment available to the people like the television, sports, computers , internet where they could use them. The way these celebrities behave affects the maximum amount of the population. The entertainers are active with everyone on different social sites like the Facebook, twitter, Instagram which are important to the youth. On the other hand, the older people are not more active in the social sites and are not interested in the personal lives of the celebrities. The older people do not feel the need to be more indulged into these activities but rather prefer to enjoy the natural beauty of the Earth. For example, my parents do not often watch these entertainment shows or the sports which may affect or be important to them. IT is not necessary for them to be active into the opinions of these celebrities. My father often enjoys going out with his friends for coffee or walk rather that watching a movie on the television. He prefer to watch news which not only improves his knowledge but he is also entertained by it. On the other hand, me and my brother rather prefer to watch a movie or a tv show which not only entertains us but also we like to see what the trend at present.
To weigh both sides of the argument, I would like to say that the activities,behaviour or the opinions of the celebrities affect the young people more than the older people
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 244, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
...try to copy the different styles of the famous celebrities like the movie stars. Most of the young...
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Line 2, column 450, Rule ID: BE_INTEREST_IN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'interested'?
Suggestion: interested
...wards their academic activities but are interesting in kinds of activities. They not only l...
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Line 2, column 905, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...n his academics but also in the sports. He loves to play cricket. He has his favou...
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Line 2, column 931, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...n the sports. He loves to play cricket. He has his favourite cricketers whom he ge...
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Line 2, column 971, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gets'.
Suggestion: gets
...He has his favourite cricketers whom he get inspired by. My brother not only tries ...
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Line 3, column 346, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e like the television, sports, computers , internet where they could use them. The...
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Line 3, column 1212, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'prefers'.
Suggestion: prefers
... watching a movie on the television. He prefer to watch news which not only improves h...
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Line 4, column 77, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , behaviour
... I would like to say that the activities,behaviour or the opinions of the celebrities affe...
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Line 4, column 173, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... young people more than the older people
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i think, in my view, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2762.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 587.0 407.700716846 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70528109029 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9222030514 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65382642026 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.396933560477 0.524837075471 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 869.4 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.05999992 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.3125 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.34375 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8125 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190985927862 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0530188640762 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447125181511 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125083551763 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436176031206 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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