Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, many of people in daily life seek some of their hero's opinion and behaviors. Among vast range of people following up of this attitude is more highlighted and among others its faded its colors. As far as I am concerned, noticing to celeberities attitude is more colorful between youth because not only are they enthusiastic follower of well-known peoples, but also they are more up to dated.
One of the most intresting facet of this discussion is that all youth are tremendously think toward to be one of this famous people and they impersonate them as character of some celeberities. For instance, there are plenty of youth football fans that play soccer for entertaiment and they seek their hero athletes in football and follow his or her social media pages to what he or she says or what reaction their here does in any happenings. On the contrary, other older people almost find their heroes and hectic daily life of them inhibited them to follow celebrities and in some what their not liking to what that famous people said in occured events.
Another crucially important aspect of this discusion is that in any society young people are more up to date in using opinion of their celeberities. Older people have their attitudes and their customes and do not try to what that famous people attitude toward this matter of life or what that well-known athlete says about sports. For example, imagine a youth seek for appropriate diet beside doing personal sport, he or she try to know what type of diet his or her hero in special branches of sport uses and follow up them.
To summarize, youth are more enthusiastic to follow their hero of celeberities and this sense fade they color as he or she be older and all aforementined information prove this claims.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...s, but also they are more up to dated. One of the most intresting facet of this...
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...sion is that all youth are tremendously think toward to be one of this famous people ...
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Suggestion: somewhat
...bited them to follow celebrities and in some what their not liking to what that famous pe...
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... famous people said in occured events. Another crucially important aspect of th...
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'tries'.
Suggestion: tries
... beside doing personal sport, he or she try to know what type of diet his or her he...
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...this sense fade they color as he or she be older and all aforementined information...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1468.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78175895765 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60835385858 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491856677524 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 471.6 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.0600710164 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.8 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7 20.6045352989 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148716412133 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725130684855 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0249868681321 0.0737576698707 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104434281268 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0193288479322 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.04 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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