Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

As public figures, celebrities are inclined to give speeches or share their opinions with audiences easily. Their opinions have a great influence on the others both young people and old people. As far as I concerned, their opinions are more important to younger ones rather than to older ones. Three elaborated statements are following for supporting my view.

First and foremost, comparing to the older ones, younger people spend much more time than them to follow the hot events. Younger people naturally have more energy on discussing the current infomations and exchanging their thoughts than older people. So celebrities who are more exposed on TV program are followed by more young than old. Consequently, younger people are more influenced by them than the old.

Secondly, younger people are on their stages of exploring the world while older ones have already experience enough. Youngers are cuirous and passionate, they need the other's opinion as guidelines and inspriations. While older people have already constructed their own system of thoughts. Their habits are less influenced by the others' opinions. They chose slow down their life, relatively close their door and enjoy what they really like.

Last but not the least, younger people have more commonplaces with the celebrities such as entertainers and athletes than the older ones. They are more likely influenced by those celebrities.

For all have been discussed may finally draw a conclusion that says celebrities have more influenced toward young people. So, famous people should be careful what they are saying in public.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'experienced'.
Suggestion: experienced
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Suggestion: others'; other's
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Line 5, column 216, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...opinion as guidelines and inspriations. While older people have already constructed t...
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to slow'
Suggestion: to slow
...nced by the others opinions. They chose slow down their life, relatively close their...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, while, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 52.1666666667 40% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1353.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 253.0 407.700716846 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34782608696 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62964994245 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 212.727598566 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553359683794 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.3426347278 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.5882352941 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8823529412 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17647058824 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307367251335 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113623385187 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615795174079 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191655026049 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.076018283193 0.0645574589148 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
More content wanted.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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