Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
We are living in a world that celebrities and famous people can infuence many people in society. The power of their impacts is undeniable. But whether they can influence the older people or the young ones, generated many controversies among soceties. From my vantage view, I firmly believe that teegers and young people are the main subject of celebrities speech. I will elaborate on my reasons in the following paragraphs.
First, young people lack the proper perception to differentiate between the right decision and the wrong one. They are confused with the complexity of the surrounding and are subjected a unique transition durring their purites. They seek for the right answer to define the true porpuse of their life. We all were kids some time in the past and as a common mistake we did not listen to our parrents orders. All they wanted were our happines and prosperous life. Teenagers do not usually follow their parents rules and search for their own conventional rules. As a result of poor perception of real facts and unfollowing parents rules, they resort to the celebrities rules. My situation in the past can illustrate my point. When I was youger, I was confused of my destination. I did not know what to do with my life. I left the school in the persuit of the true definition of life. Some said we had to live in the moment and enjoy evey second of our life efficiently. Others encouraged me to contemplate deeper and invest my time and energy for the future in demanding flourishing result. One day I saw a successful athletes who was talking about the meaning of life on the television. He told to the host that we must use every moment in our life and avoid spending that. I realized that I found the true message that I wanted. I followed evey point that he indicated and decide to go to long travel around the world. Now, I am happy with my experience that I gained durring the long journey.
Moreover, young people are more exposed to social networks and internet than old people do. They spend a lot of time in front of computers and chat with their friends. In this trend whoever has more followers, has more impression on youngs and people who are engaging in this area. celebrities exploit the social networks for their benefits and interest. They create a great image of themselve by attracting numerous followers and fans. They also do that not because they like the idea of becoming famous, but also for earning more money and credit. Between this crowded monetory interaction, young people will attract to the fantasy image of actors and well-known people and blindly respond to their request. they consider celebrites as a god who whatever they say will be trustworthy and honest. They experienced many difficulities and gained valuable points. As a result their words must be true and reliable.
In conclusion, unfortunately, young people are more exposed to the opinions of celebrities, whether by low power of perception or appealing to the high quality image of them.
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- TOEFL T P O 47 - Integrated Writing Task 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 905, Rule ID: IN_THE_MOMENT
Message: Did you mean 'at the moment' (=currently)?
Suggestion: at the moment
...ition of life. Some said we had to live in the moment and enjoy evey second of our life effic...
Line 2, column 1114, Rule ID: A_PLURAL
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'athlete'?
...hing result. One day I saw a successful athletes who was talking about the meaning of li...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
...d people who are engaging in this area. celebrities exploit the social networks for their b...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
...e and blindly respond to their request. they consider celebrites as a god who whatev...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, well, in conclusion, talking about, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2491.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 519.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79961464355 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67820933998 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504816955684 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 782.1 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.6003584229 165% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.78185328 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.2647058824 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2647058824 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.67647058824 5.45110844103 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174051648998 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.04204226538 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407633088855 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114845526399 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357244283861 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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