Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
In each society, celebrities such as actors, musicians, and athlete attract a lot of attention. People are interested in their life style, the way they look, etc. Young people are the group who are more interested in celebrities. In what follows, two elaborate reasons will vindicate my stand point.
First of all, as a fundamental concept in psychology context, the young always try to find someone as a hero to follow. In their age the are more interested in the world of famous people. Their fancy life always attracts young people. They try to act such their favorite celebrities in different ways. For instance, when I was at high school, I really enthusiastic about a singer. So, I try to dressed up and make up like her.
The second noteworthy reason is that the young are the most group in the society who use social media. Celebrities have different social media to share their different aspect of their life for example, the important event, their latest accomplishment, or their holydays activities. The young people follow famous people in different social pages like Instagram. I believe that this exposure to the personal life of celebrities make them more interested in their life. For example, every night I check my Instagram and see what my favorite celebrities post on their page.
In conclusion, the young are keen on the celebrities' life because base on a psychological reason they try to find a person to act like a hero for them, and they can follow them. Moreover, the young people have access to different social media which can have contact with famous person to follow them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 134, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...meone as a hero to follow. In their age the are more interested in the world of famous ...
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Line 7, column 42, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'celebrities'' or 'celebrity's'?
Suggestion: celebrities'; celebrity's
...n conclusion, the young are keen on the celebrities life because base on a psychological re...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, moreover, really, second, so, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1338.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 273.0 407.700716846 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9010989011 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68452939337 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 212.727598566 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494505494505 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 422.1 618.680645161 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9480613908 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.7058823529 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0588235294 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82352941176 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139213208221 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0558053800953 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0536850381064 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0980511951494 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0226353694573 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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